Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 18 - Employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005
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The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.
Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
»You should write at least 150 words.
»You should take 20 minutes to complete this task.
Sample Answer 1:
The supplied bar graph shows changes in employment rates in six countries namely Australia, Switzerland, Ireland, UK, New Zealand and the USA between 1995 and 2005. As is observed, more and more people of working age are employed, and there have been significant improvements for women, although they lag behind men in entering the workforce.
The most obvious trend in the graph is that women have lower employment rates in most of the countries in the graph. For example, in Australia in 1995, 57 percent of men could find work or retain a job, but only 27 percent of women. The difference was even bigger in New Zealand, with 60 percent of women. Even in Switzerland and Iceland, slightly more men than women were in the job market.
The second biggest trend in the graph is the improvement in employment between 1995 and 2005. In all countries shown, figures for both men and women improved. The biggest change was in the United Kingdom, from 55 percent of men in 1995 to 73 percent over the ten years period. Furthermore, the increases in employment rates for women were much higher in New Zealand. The percentage of working women jumped from 25 percent to 42 percent, and in the United States from 45 percent to 61 percent over the decade.
In conclusion, all the countries in the graph showed at least a 12 percent increase in employment rates of both men and women over the ten years. While men had relatively higher employment rate throughout the period, more and more women appear to be entering the labour market.
(Approximately 265 words)
( This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)
Model Answer 2:
The supplied bar graph compares the employment rates between men and female in 6 different countries for the years 1995 and 2005. As is observed from the given data, the male employment percentage was higher than the female employment percentage in all of the given six countries and the overall employment conditions in Iceland, Switzerland is comparatively better than the other four countries.
As is given in the presentation, initially in 1995, more than 65% male were employed in Switzerland and in Iceland while in other four countries this rate was less than 60%. After 10 years, the male employment percentage reached over 70% except in Australia. On the contrary, in 1995, the female employment percentage was over 50% only in Switzerland and for the rest of the countries, this was from 28 to 58%. This percentage also increased over the 10 years and in 2005, female employee percentage reached to almost 70% in Switzerland and for the rest of the countries, it was 50%.
In summary, the male had a better employment record than the female and in 10 years the employment opportunity for both male and female increased.