Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 18 - Employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

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Academic writing task 1 sample 18

Sample Answer 1:
The supplied bar graph shows changes in employment rates in six countries namely Australia, Switzerland, Ireland, UK, New Zealand and the USA   between 1995 and 2005. As is observed, more and more people of working age are employed, and there have been significant improvements for women, although they lag behind men in entering the workforce.

The most obvious trend in the graph is that women have lower employment rates in most of the countries in the graph. For example, in Australia in 1995, 57 percent of men could find work or retain a job, but only 27 percent of women. The difference was even bigger in New Zealand, with 60 percent of women. Even in Switzerland and Iceland, slightly more men than women were in the job market.

The second biggest trend in the graph is the improvement in employment between 1995 and 2005. In all countries shown, figures for both men and women improved. The biggest change was in the United Kingdom, from 55 percent of men in 1995 to 73 percent over the ten years period. Furthermore, the increases in employment rates for women were much higher in New Zealand. The percentage of working women jumped from 25 percent to 42 percent, and in the United States from 45 percent to 61 percent over the decade.

In conclusion, all the countries in the graph showed at least a 12 percent increase in employment rates of both men and women over the ten years. While men had relatively higher employment rate throughout the period, more and more women appear to be entering the labour market.

(Approximately 265 words) 

( This model answer can be followed  as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Model Answer 2:
The supplied bar graph compares the employment rates between men and female in 6 different countries for the years 1995 and 2005. As is observed from the given data, the male employment percentage was higher than the female employment percentage in all of the given six countries and the overall employment conditions in Iceland, Switzerland is comparatively better than the other four countries.

As is given in the presentation, initially in 1995, more than 65% male were employed in Switzerland and in Iceland while in other four countries this rate was less than 60%. After 10 years, the male employment percentage reached over 70% except in Australia. On the contrary, in 1995, the female employment percentage was over 50% only in Switzerland and for the rest of the countries, this was from 28 to 58%. This percentage also increased over the 10 years and in 2005, female employee percentage reached to almost 70% in Switzerland and for the rest of the countries, it was 50%.

In summary, the male had a better employment record than the female and in 10 years the employment opportunity for both male and female increased.

Sample Answer 3:
The supplied bar chart compares the employment rate among men and women workers in 1995 and 2005 in six countries across the globe. It is clear that in 1995, the employment rates in Iceland and Switzerland were comparatively higher than other countries and more men were employed than that of women in the given countries.

Male employment rates in Switzerland and Iceland was over 65% while it was exactly 60% in New Zealand in 1995. In this year about 58% Australian male was employed while in the USA it was just below 60%. Finally, in the UK about 55% male were employed. On the other side, women employment rate in this year was comparatively lower (only 27-28%) in Australia and New Zealand. Women in Switzerland had the highest employment rate in this year which was approximately 58%.

After 10 years, the employment rate, both for woman and men, increased and the highest employment rate for men could be observed in Iceland (82%) and lowest in Australia (69%). Similarly, the highest women employment rate was in Switzerland (68%) and lowest in Australia (38%).  Though the percentage of women employment increased in 2005, men were still ahead of women in employment sectors in these six countries.

[Written by - Basil Alias]

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+1 # Dragonic 2017-02-16 04:24
How did you reach to this percentage? How did you get it? What kind of stat did you use?
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0 # Alinat 2016-09-29 21:32
The bar chart demonstrates the male and female employment ratio in 6 selected countries in 1995 and 2005. Overall, an evident increase in employment rates was seen in all six countries for the given period. Furthermore, the proportion of male and female workers remained almost the same as well, with men providing higher rates.

Firstly, Iceland remained in the top position in terms of male job rates, with was around 71% in 1995 to around 82% in 2005. Furthermore, the UK's male employment percentages showed a significant increase, from being the lowest in 1995 with only 55% to 72% in 2005; to overpassing Australia with around 68%. The proportions remained the same among all the countries, as well as men dominance at the employment market, which was around 70% in all 6 countries.

In 1995, the lowest job rate among women was in New Zealand (25%) but it jumped dramatically to about 41% in 2005. However, the numbers were still low compared to Switzerland which reached a peak in 2005 with 65%, but on the other hand was still 10% less than men rates in 2005.
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+11 # Mohsen 2016-05-28 17:05
The given bar chart compares the employed male and female in 6 different countries namely Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand and the USA in two different years. As a whole, male employment ratio had always been better than that of women in all 6 countries in both years and in 2005 women employment scenario improved significantly.

According to the given illustration, in Iceland with over 80 % and 70% employment rate for men in 2005 and 1995 respectively had the highest male employment rate among the given countries. Women were employed approximately half than the male in 1995 in this country. In 2005, women were still 30% less employed than men, meaning no change after 10 years in Iceland.

Comparing Australia and New Zealand, a very similar trend could be observed in these two countries. There was a 30% gap between men and women employment in 1995 and the data in 2005 illustrated the same difference after 10 years with around 70% jobs for men and around 40% for women.

In contrast, women made remarkable improvement in the USA, the UK and Switzerland in the given time period. Women reduced the gap in these three countries from about 5% to 10% in 10 years.
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+6 # Meet Parikh 2015-11-20 16:27
The given bar graph illustrates the information of employment rates for the year 1995 and 2005 of six countries namely Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand and the USA, on the basis of gender and their employment rate. It is noticeable that there was significant improvement in employment rates of women in 2005 as compared to 1995, but still they were lagging behind in employment rate as compared to men.

The employment rate particularly for male for the year 1995, was highest in Iceland nearly 70 which increased to 80 over a 10 year period. A gradual increment was seen in other countries and by 2005 all the countries had reached an employment rate of almost 70. A great increment was seen in UK from 55 to approximately 75.

In 1995, the highest employment rate among women was in Switzerland that is 55, followed by UK, 50. Rest all the countries had below 50 employment rate with lowest in Australia and New Zealand approximately 25. This rate increased in 2005. Among them the highest was still in Switzerland, followed by the UK and the USA having almost equal employment rate, 60 while the rate was below 60 for the remaining countries.

In conclusion, men had higher employment rates compared to women and more women appeared to entering the market than the past.
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-2 # Emil Goyushzade 2015-07-27 17:26
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of employments for both genders over the six different countries during a decade. It is clear that the highest figure for all countries was represented by male and among them Iceland was leader in1995 and 2005.

According to the bar chart in Iceland there was a significant increase in the proportion of male workers with the pattern rising from 70% to just over 80%. The indicates for women was the same but the relevant figures were lower. When it comes to the second the highest share, it was Switzerland. There was a gradual development in the percentage of men employees where the pattern climbed from 65% to a bit under 80%. This was closely followed by female while the suitable figures were a bit lower.

Turning to Australia, during the decade the proportion of male employees increased sharply from about 68% to a just under 70%. We can see the same improvement in female where the share recovered from 28% to approximately 40%. Looking at the UK, between 1995 and 2005 there was an abrupt improvement with the pattern going up from 55% to a bit over 70%. This was nearly followed by opposite gender which the figure developed from 50% to 62%. Coming to the USA, in 2005 the percentage of men were represented at approximately 70%. This was closely followed by women at 60%. In 1995, 60% were made up by the male workers, while the figure for female at 45%.

Finally, from 1995 to 2005 there was an abrupt improvement in the percentage of women workers whereas their proportion in workforce went up from 25% to 40%. We can also see a dramatic increase among males with the figure climbing from 60% to a bit over 70%.
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0 # Nima 2015-07-25 12:36
The given chart depicts changing procedure of employment rates between male and female through 10 years, from 1995 and 2005 in 6 different countries.

As is provided as a census of perusal in the presented illustration, Iceland male had the most employment ratio among other spheres in 1995 and 2005 with 71 % and 83% respectively and Switzerland had this position for female with 56% and 68% respectively in 1995 and 2005. In all countries male had more employment proportion than female but figure illustrates New Zealand, Iceland and Australia had the most gap between men and women proportion in 1995 and 2005 with more than 30%. Also in the USA male and female had 59 and 45 percent in 1995 and 71 and 61 percent in 2005 respectively. Also UK had the lowest percentage of employment for male in 1995 with 55%.

In summary, in all regions employment rates for both genders increased from 1995 to 2005 in all sections and unemployment among women was more than men.
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+2 # Ricky Setiawan 2015-03-06 03:23
The supplied bar graph depicts data on the employment rates in six countries in one decade, from 1995 to 2005. The x-axis represents the countries, which are Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand, and the USA. Each category is then divided by year and by gender. While the y-axis represents the unemployment rates.

The graph shows an obvious trend in which men had significantly higher rates of employment compared to women.

The highest percentage of working men were in Iceland, while the lowest employment rates happened to be in Australia, both in 1995 and 2005. Whereas in the case of female jobs, Switzerland held the top rank while the most bottom rank was held by Australia. Another trend that can be seen is an obvious increase in professional opportunities both for men and women in the later year. A huge leap of male employment rate happened in the UK, while for women, it was New Zealand.

In summary, job opportunities in these countries enhanced in ten years and men were ahead of women in employment.
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