Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 20 - The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries

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The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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Academic writing task 1 sample 20

Sample Answer 1:
The given bar graph shows data on the number of prisoners in five countries namely Britain, Australia, New Zealand, US and Canada between 1930 and 1980. As is given on the graph, Canada had the highest number of prisoners initially in 1930 while Great Britain had the least prisoners in the same year but after 50 years in 1980 the number of total prisoners decreased in Canada and the United States had the largest number of prisoners.

Initially, in 1930, there were 120 thousand prisoners in Canada and that was the largest number of prisoners among the given five countries. There were 100 thousand prisoners both in US and New Zealand which was second largest in this year. Australia had around 70 thousand prisoners and Great Britain had only 30 thousand prisoners and that was the least in number. After ten years in 1940, Prisoners’ number in Britain remained same while the number decreased in Australia, New Zealand and Canada. But this year the total number of prisoners increased in the US by 30 thousand and reached to 130 thousand which was highest among the five countries for this year. In 1950, the prisoners’ number increased in Britain and slightly decreased in Australia and New Zealand. On the other hand, the prisoner in Canada increased and got highest among the five countries and decreased in the US. In 1960, the prisoners, number increased in all the countries except Canada and the US had the largest number of prisoners. Interestingly in 1970, the number became same in Britain, New Zealand and Australia which was about 63 thousand and both Canada and the US had more than 80 thousand prisoners in this year. Finally, in 1980, the prisoners’ number all of the countries increased while the number decreased in Australia. The US had the highest number of prisoners in this year amounting around 137 thousand and Great Britain, Canada and New Zealand had more than 80 thousand prisoners in this year.

In summary, over the 50 years period, the crime and imprisonment number got worse in US and Britain while Australia, Canada and New Zealand did some progress in it. In 1980, Australia had the least number of prisoners which indicate their improvement in law and order. 

( This model answer can be followed  as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Sample Answer 2:
The table chart compares the numbers of prisoners from 1930 to 1980 in five different countries namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada.

It is clearly seen that the United States had the highest number of imprisonment overall. Also, Britain had the lowest figure for 4 out of 6 years. In 1930 ,The number of prisoners in the United  States was the highest with 120 thousand prisoners  , then increased significantly to reach a peak of 140 thousand people in 1980.By contrast, Britain had the lowest figure  until 1970, then figure jumped suddenly to reach 90 thousand prisoners.

Canada had the highest number of imprisonment in 1930 and 1960 with nearly 140 thousand people in each year.In 1970 the number of prisoners in Great Britain, New Zealand and Australia was same, about 70 thousand people. In 1980, 50 thousands of people in New Zealand were put in prison which was the lowest figure in this year.

( Written by  - Safa Ahmed )

Sample Answer 3:
The given bar graph depicts the total number of prisoners in thousands, in five different countries namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada during a period of 50 years commencing from 1930.

As is evident in the presentation, Great Britain had the lowest number of imprisonment throughout the initial 40 years till 1980. Interestingly, Britain had witnessed a steady growth in figures, which started from around 30000 in the year 1930 and reached around 70000 in the year 1970. By contrast, the United States had the maximum number of criminals throughout the entire span of years except in the first decade, which is 1930. Moreover, in the year 1980, United States had to imprison the highest number of citizens in the entire period, which accounted for around 130000.

It is apparent from the graph that the crime rate in Canada had fallen gradually and steadily, from 120000 people in 1930 to a significantly less 90000 people in 1980. However, except for the years, 1930 and 1980, Australia had considerably less number of jailing and the New Zealand had always positioned as top three consistently just behind Canada and the United States.

Overall, the graph gives an impression that, collectively, the crime rate had been more or less the same without any significant or dramatic changes and many countries shows a dip and hike which accounts for the fact that there is no specific trend in the context of imprisonment.

( Written by  - Anoop Asokan )

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0 # Rojan 2016-07-31 05:42
I want to ask a question. In the first sample, it does not show full data and only makes comparisons. Is it necessary to show full data?
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0 # IELTS Mentor 2016-08-01 13:57
It is better to show comparison and contrast, where relevant and presenting main data of the chart.
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0 # Siddharth Trivedi 2016-07-18 18:10
Dear Mentor, here in question it's mentioned "BETWEEN 1930 AND 1980" means 50 years or 5 decades but in given table 6 BAR CHARTS were shown. So which one is correct or what to follow?
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+3 # Philomina 2016-03-29 18:57
The given bar chart compares the number of imprisoned people in five different countries namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and finally Canada during five decades commencing from 1930. The figure of imprisonment is given in thousand and Canada and the US had far more prisoners in this given period than other countries.

In 1930, the highest number of prisoners was in Canada, while the lowest was in Great Britain. By 1980 the highest numbers of imprisoned people were in the United States. However the least prisoners were in Australia in this year. In 1930 the number of imprisoned persons in Great Britain was around only 30000 and it increased during the fifty years to reach approximately 83000. On conversely Australia and New Zealand had about (70000 and 100000) prisoners respectively in 1930 and by 1980 and the number of prisoners declined to around (50000 and 85000) consecutively. Furthermore, in 1970, the number of prisoners was the same roughly 65 thousand prisoners in Great Britain, Australia and New Zealand, whereas, the United States and Canada, represented the highest number of sentenced people during the five decades.
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0 # Philomina 2016-03-29 18:45
Dear mentor,
I'd like to ask which one is correct:
to repeat each time prisoner or whatever, or I can right the numbers only.
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0 # Arko 2016-08-01 13:59
Usually, you do not need to repeat all the time but write a few times so that the examiner can recall what number you are talking about.
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-1 # IELTS Mentor 2016-04-02 10:42
Both would be correct. We would advise you not to repeat the same word over and over again and using numbers.
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-3 # Zithendra 2015-12-01 21:18
The comparison among different countries (Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, the United States and Canada ) about imprisonment is shown over five decades from 1930 to 1980 on x-axis. Prisoners in each country over a decade were shown as thousands in numbers in y-axis. (Please correct all my grammar mistakes)
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+18 # Rajinder Singh 2015-02-27 19:42
The supplied bar graph compares the information as regarding prisoners in five countries namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada in 5 decades.

As in presented in the illustrations, the key feature of scenario is that Canada had higher prisoners than that of other countries. First of all, Canada had 120 thousand prisoners in 1930 while Australia and the United States had 100 thousand prisoners. However, in 1940, the United States had higher count of prisoners while Canada had a second largest count of prisoners as other countries except United States.

Moreover, Canada had greater influx of prisoners as others in 1950. It was about 116 thousand. In addition, the United States had approximately 120 thousand prisoners in 1960 while Canada had about 100 prisoners which indicated a minor gap as other countries. Despite to this, the equivalent number of prisoners was had by Great Britain, Australia and New Zealand in 1970. Beside this, the huge disparity was noticed in the number of prisoners between United States and Australia in 1980.

The whole scenario projects the information that Australia had very less prisoners after 5 decades which indicates the improvement in law and order than that of other countries.
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