Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 27 - Main reasons for study among students and support they receive from employers

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    » You should write at least 150 words.
    » You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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Sample Answer 1:
The given graphs show the reason why students from different age groups study and also show the support they get from their employers.

According to the first bar graph, people who are under 40 years old mostly study for the career while people over 49 years mainly study for their interest. Interestingly for the age group 40 to 49, there number of people who study for career and the number of people who study for interest is same. 80% students under 26 years old continue their study for having a good career while only 10% of this age group does that for subject interest. The percentage of students who study for career decreases with the increase of their age and an opposite pattern can be observed for the percentage of students who study for subject interest rather than their career enhancement.

Based on the bar graph 2, more than 60% students under 26 years old get support from their employers for their education and this supports includes the time off and monetary supports they get. This percentage reduces with the increase of age and at 30-39 age group, 32% get the support from the employers. After that the employers’ support for their employees’ education increases and reaches to 45% for the over 49 year’s age group.

In summary, most young people continue their study to have a career and as they grow up, their main reason for study becomes interests on subjects and the employees less than 30 years of age and over 49 years of age  get more support from their employers than other age groups.

(Approximately 263 words)  

( This model answer can be followed  as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Sample Answer 2:
The bar graphs illustrate the factors of students to further their studies, divided by various age categories and the support given by the employers in terms of financial and work time.

Overall, it is clearly shown that there is a decreasing trend for the students who study for the career as they become older, whereas the reverse is true for those who study for interest.

First of all, it is apparent that the highest percentage of students who study for the career is among the student aged under 26 (80%) and the lowest for this figure is approximately 20% for those who are over 49 years old. Turning to the study purpose of interest, the least proportion of students is those who aged 26 and the peak is over 49 years old. In addition, the same percentage of people, aged 40 to 49, study for their career and interest on subjects. To compare, more students study for their careers than for their interests in different subjects.

The second bar chart tells us that the employers give more support to their young employees (those under 26 years old) and elderly workers with the least support provided to those in the age range of 30 to 39.

( Written by - Lee Wing Qeen )

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+3 # Sukma Wati 2016-02-22 11:10
The charts provide information about the primary reasons for study and how educational cost is shared by employers among different age groups of people. The first chart reveals the reason for studying based on age and the second chart shows how much employers help those students in terms of time off and fees.

According to the first chart, it is clearly seen that interest is the main reason to study for 3 age groups (under 26, 26-29, 30-39 years). However, students who are 40-49 years old consider interest to be as important as career growth. Career even gets to be more essential for people over 49 where 70% of them take career as a reason to study and 20% for interest.

Additionally, the second chart indicates that students under 26 and 26-29 years get more help from the employers compared to other groups, 60% and 50% respectively. Oppositely, students aged 30-39 receive the lowest percentage with only 30% support while student aged 40-49 and over 49 are not far different with 35% and 40% accordingly.

Overall, the reason for studying and the support from employers vary differently depending on students’ age.
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+7 # Rajinder Singh 2015-02-23 17:07
The supplied bar graphs elucidate the information about the proportion of two main reason for study according to different age group of students and support of employer for them.

As is presented in the illustrations,the key feature of the scenario is that the under 26 age group student do higher percentage of study for career and they received the vast amount of money from employer.

Firstly, between 26-29 and 30-39 age of student mostly doing the study for career while 40-49 show the equivalent percentage to doing study for career as well as for interest. Moreover, over 49 age student do study for only interest.

Secondly, under 26 and 26 to 29 age group are get as much employer support than that of others age group. In addition to, 40-49 and above 49 age students are get 40% and 50% employer support for fees and so more.
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