Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 33 - The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Ages and Genders in USA

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Ages and Genders in the USA.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    » You should write at least 150 words.
    » You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Academic IELTS writing task 1 sample 33

Sample Answer 1:
The chart compares the number of people (in thousands) having heart attacks per year in the USA based on their age and gender.  As a general trend, it is observed that more men suffer from heart attacks compared to women in all age groups.

It is seen in the chart that risk of having a heart attack among men increases manyfold after the age of 45. As compared to 123,000 men having a heart attack in the age group of 29-44, there are 424,000 and 440,000 men who suffer from heart attacks in the age group of 45-64 and 65+ respectively. Only 3000 women suffer from heart attacks under the age of 45. The risk increases in the age group of 45-64 and reaches almost the similar rate as of men after the age of 65.

In summary, men are at a greater risk of having heart attacks in all age groups and the risk increases for both men and women after the age of 65.

[By - Priyanka Varma ]

Sample Answer 2:  
The given chart shows data on the number of the US people who suffer from heart attack dividing them in three age groups. As is observed from the given information, men have more heart attack rates than female and both men and women over 65 years old are prone to heart attack than younger age groups.

Men have more heart attach rates than women in all age groups. Firstly, 123 thousand men suffer from heart attacks compared to the 3 thousand female who fall under the 29 to 44 age group. Again, among the 45 to 64 years group, more than 400 thousand men have had heart attacks and this number is almost three times higher than the rate among female of this age group. Finally, US people over 65 years old suffer from heart attacks more than other two age groups and that exceeds 300 thousand for female and 400 thousand for men. Women in 65+ age group suffer from heart attacks significantly more than other age groups.

In conclusion, more American men suffer from heart attacks than women and this rate is higher among the people over 65 years old. 

(Approximately 181 words) 

( This model answer can be followed  as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

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0 # Kimloing 2016-06-18 08:56
The given bar chart gives the number of men and women who have heart attacks from age 29 to over 65 in the USA. In general, men are more likely to have heart attacks than women in the USA and the risk of heart attacks increases with the age of people.

Based on the chart, people from 29 to 44 have the least risk of heart attacks. Only 3 thousand women of this age category have heart attacks in a year while this number is 123 thousand for men which is 41 times higher. Between the age 45 and 64, the numbers of men who get heart attacks increases to 424 thousands and the number of females is just over 135 thousands. For people who are more than 65 years old are likely to be affected by heart attacks more than other age groups. While the heart attack victim males rise to 440 thousands, 374 thousand female have this in a year. The number of female who have heart attacks when they get older is dramatically higher than the number of ladies during their age between 45 to 64.
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+1 # Kavery 2016-02-19 19:47
Time is not mentioned anywhere in the question. Why are you using past tense?
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+1 # Mercedes806 2016-02-21 16:08
Where do you see past tense?
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