IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 635 - Traditionally women play the role of upbringing their children

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Traditionally women play the role of upbringing their children while men work outside to earn money for the family. Some people argue that women make better parent than man and that’s why they should play the greater role in upbringing children. Others however say that men can be as good as women in parenting.

What is your point of view on this issue?

Give reason for your answers and provide relevant example and experience you might have.

Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer 1:
Raising children in any society is influenced by their own values and cultures. Restlessness traditional world viewer, think and see that the women are the dominant person in taking care of their children. However, in modern society, women and men as an equal to taking their part in raising up the children.

Traditionally, people exhort the women to take primary responsibility for nursing and educating their children. Women take a crucial role in growing the kids to being an enough older. Meanwhile, the man pays more attentions on fulfill goods for the family members. Men are the person with superior power in making decisions in the family and women is the person who are powerless and follow the decision of the man. She can not involve in voted her voices on take decision, otherwise she only focus on taking care and growing their children.

Furthermore, modern people show that taking care of their children is older people want to. Both of men and women have willingness to support the young person to become a man and a woman. The men not only give the authorities to the women to being a single fighter in to provide kids needed, but he is also actively involved in raising their children.

To sum up, take car and guardian the kids not only being as women responsibility, but men also involved actively in younger life development. From my point of view, both of them, men and women have equal responsibility for taking care of and raising their children. Men and women have the same position in making decision in their family as well as in helping their kids for a better life in the future.
[ Written by -  Marius Elabi ]
Model Answer 2:
In todays’ modem world, it is crucial for both parents to teach the children to become a good citizen of a society.  However,  there are a handful of people assert that women should be more responsible in raising children as they make better parents than men which I disagree with.
A recent study has shown that women are comparatively more patient than men.  Thus, it suggests that women have the obligation to educate their children; for example, teaching them how to solve mathematical problems. This is because they have more patience than men do, hence their children will probably learn more efficiently from their mother than father. In addition, it is proven that, in general, more fathers will scold their children whenever they make a mistake without telling them what they have done is wrong. Nevertheless, mother will explain clearly what the fault is and what should be done to tackle the problem to their children.
On the other hand, men have indispensable roles in guiding their children to the right path of their future lives. In most family, father acts as a good role model to their sons and daughters. Statistic from a recent research conducted in Singapore explains that children especially the boys have a higher tendency to commit crimes when they are not live a nuclear family. This can be due to the reason that they have no father as the role model who will teach them the good values. In short, men have no exception in playing a greater role in educating children.
In conclusion, children will be a successful and educated citizens only if both the parents willing to educate them dedicatedly and patiently. I believe mother and father are the closest persons to their children who have the greatest influence on them to guide them to be a contributive citizen to the nation.
[ Written by -  Lee Wing Qeen ]
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