IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 833 - The rate of unemployment in some countries is high

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

The rate of unemployment in some countries is high. Because of this, there is no need to complete an education beyond a primary school level. 

Write an essay either for or against this position.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Model Answer 1:
As the world’s population grows so does the unemployment rates in most countries. This leads many people to avow that education beyond primary school level is not needed. It is disagreed that education beyond primary school level is no longer needed, no matter how high or low the unemployment rates get. This will be proven by looking at the sophistication that higher education brings with it and how education helps to differentiate between the more productive and less productive people.

To begin, the merits of education beyond primary school level are not limited to the technical knowledge gained from the studies, they extend to the courtesies and etiquettes learned by students as they get more mature through education. For instance, it is no secret that bullying amongst children is highest up until high school, it starts to diminish from thereon as students become more in-tune to the wrongs and rights. If youngsters, start to drop out of school after primary level, those bullies, could go on to become juvenile delinquents. After analyzing this, it is clear that education beyond primary level is indeed fruitful for the society at large.

Furthermore, in absence of education, it would be harder for prospective employers to choose between more competent and less competent people. A scenario where all job applicants for a particular job are primary school level qualified, employers would be hard pressed to select the best possible candidate for the said job, illustrates this point well. Unfortunately if there are no criteria, upon which to decide between potential employees, the recruitment process will become inept. Hence, education beyond primary school level plays a pivotal role in hiring process.

In summary, higher education has a significant part to play in humanizing the youth, and in distinguishing between the skilled and the unskilled. Thus, I beg to differ with the idea that education beyond primary level is not needed. It is hoped that people will continue to acquire knowledge through education, regardless of the levels of unemployment.

[ Written by - Sameed Qureshi ]

Model Answer 2:
It is a fact that several countries have a high unemployment rate nowadays. Therefore it is not necessary for the people to complete secondary school level. I personally disagree with the statement and the following essay will discuss about it in details.

It is undeniable that some countries have problems with unemployment these days. With the modern industrialization, companies are reducing their employees gradually as they prefer to use high technology machineries. And then many third world countries such as India, Pakistan or Bangladesh have a large population, but only several of them have high education. While the demand of low skill job is getting lesser, the population of low skill workers is increasing rapidly in the past few years. As a result, the number of unemployed people has become higher than ever nowadays.

Based on that fact, it is really important for people to have good and high education. To obtain the qualification, people should have obtained basic education that start from basic level until senior high school. When the numbers of educated people in the country increase, they could get a lot benefits. One of them is that more people will understand about birth control, which is important for controlling the population. And as the country's population slowly decreases, unemployment rate will also gradually decline. Therefore, it is really important for the government to provide decent education for their people.

In conclusion, it is true that many countries are facing unemployment issues currently. But I disagree if we should eliminate high school to solver the issues. Higher education would have a positive effect to the unemployment rate and therefore I recommend all children should complete their education until high school.

[ Written by - Darwin Lesmana ]

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