IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 1136 - Parents have great influence on children’s development

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think that family life and parents have great influence on children’s development, while others consider that external influence plays a more important role in children’s life.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Sample Answer 1:
It is generally believed by many that parental influence and family life are extremely important for the development of children, while others realise that children behaviour is influenced more by external factors like friends, teachers and surroundings. In my opinion, influences of parents, relatives and family life are essential for proper psychological and physical growth of a child, but environmental and external influences are more useful for them to confront real life. This essay will discuss both of the views before drawing a rational conclusion.

In one hand, many think that parents as the closest ones for children have a significant impact on their development, especially to shape a good childhood. The sense family, relationship, responsibility, punctuality, sense of humanity etc. moral qualities which are instilled in a child by parents play an important part in the growth of children. Love and attention from parents will develop strong character in a child while lacking of proper parenting will often ruin it. According to some psychological research, children who grow up with the lack of attention from their parents often turn into a trouble-maker in their teenage. Furthermore, children mostly mimic their parents and become more like their parents than anyone else. Undoubtedly, this single fact proves how important it is for a child to have a family and proper parenting.

On the other hand, to become a complete human, we need to study in a school, interact with teachers and neighbours, have friends, face challenges, learn from our environment,  gain social experiences and all those factors have crucial roles to play in a child’s life. Parents keep their offspring safe from dangers while their real life experiences teach them how to deal with those challenges. In schools and in other places, children will encounter several kinds of situations that teach them how to solve their own problems. Consequently, not only education but also social skills can be acquired by children in the school which is invaluable for his life and can help children to develop ability in a community to interact with other people and have a normal life beyond their family borders.

To infer, I am convinced that while parents have a huge impact on children’s attitude, social interactions and external factors are also imperative and cannot be ignored for the overall development of children.

[ By Prisca Oktaviani Samosir]

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0 # Joyce Tan 2017-01-10 10:53
I have a question- Is it suitable to use the word 'imperative' for the last sentence? Thank you.
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0 # Joyce Tan 2017-01-10 10:35
Wao, this sample answer is fantastic. I feel every sentence is the main point, really learnt from it. Thank you.
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