IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 25 - Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your answer with examples and relevant evidence.

You should write at least 250 words.

Model Answer 1:  (Neutral Notion)
For nine to ten months, a woman endures the drastic physiological and emotional changes that pregnancy brings about. Because of this, a woman has the greatest right to decide on whether she will have a child or not. An ideology exists that because women take full responsibility for decisions about childbearing, she also is responsible for rearing the child. I believe that this idea is absolutely faulty.

Firstly, decisions on childbearing may be greatly affected by the woman's choice. However, other factors are also considered such as a couple's financial ability to support a child's growth. Aside from that, parenthood is a shared responsibility. A father's role is not limited to sperm donation but also includes changing diapers in the middle of the night. Also, a father should always be involved in child rearing because there are activities that are best suited to be done by a father figure, such as bringing the child to a sports event. Consequently, a child who rarely sees one's father creates a negative perception of him and may possibly create a stronger relationship with the mother alone.

In addition, women are different in the modern era. More women are breaking the traditional view that they are confined to the four wall of the home as a housewife. Therefore, there should be a joint agreement between both parents to divide the tasks. To cite an example, a mother would send the child to school while a father will be in charge of picking up the child after class.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that it is time to abolish the idea of putting the entire child rearing work on women. The idea of shared parenthood must be implemented to keep up with the change in family dynamics that occurred over the years.

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Model Answer 2:  (Neutral Notion)
I believe that child-rearing should be the responsibility of both parents and that, whilst the roles within that partnership may be different, they are nevertheless equal in importance. In some societies, it has been made easier over the years for single parents to raise children on their own. However, this does not mean that the traditional family, with both parents providing emotional support and role-models for their children, is not the most satisfactory way of bringing up children.

Of crucial importance, in my opinion, is how we define 'responsible for bringing the children up'. At its simplest, it could mean giving the financial support necessary to provide a home, food and clothes and making sure the child is safe and receives an adequate education. This would be the basic definition.

There is, however, another possible way of defining that part of the quotation. That would say it is not just a father's responsibility to provide the basics for his children, while his wife involves herself in the everyday activity of bringing them up. Rather, he should share those daily duties, spend as much time as his job allows with his children, play with them, read to them, help directly with their education, participate very fully in their lives and encourage them to share his.

It is this second, fuller, concept of 'fatherhood' that I am in favour of, although I also realise how difficult it is to achieve sometimes. The economic and employment situation in many countries means that jobs are getting more, not less, stressful, requiring long hours and perhaps long journeys to work as well. Therefore it may remain for many a desirable ideal rather than an achievable reality.

(Approximately 288 words)
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Answer 3:  (Agreement: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood)

Traditionally, gender role issue has always discriminated women and it is considered a woman to be responsible for the upbringing of children. Nowadays, these traditions are changing gradually. It is agreed that both parents should share these responsibilities and at the same time should support each other. This can be proved by looking at how fathers who spend the whole day with their children can be a good motivator for them and mothers are becoming the bread-earners for the family. Also, it is agreed that fathers motivate their children more than mothers do. For example, males are more interested towards sports activities.
Firstly, some people argue that mother should take care of the Family, especially the kids; however these thoughts have changed over the time and nowadays fathers have started sharing parental and domestic responsibilities. So, by taking their children to sports events such as football matches, swimming, etc. will develop an interest for sports in them. This shows that fathers can motivate a child to become a sports person.

Secondly, the tradition of women is to stay at home and bringing up children have changed and women have started taking work from all fields, along with this they also take care of their children. For instance, it has been seen that many working women take maternity leave during and after their pregnancy period and continue to work after these leaves. Some women prefer to do work from home if provided by their employer. In some cases, women may have better career prospects than their husbands. So, the father had to take paternity leave and become a househusband, which is becoming more common nowadays. Thus, it is clear from the above discussion women can be a bread-earning person for a family.

Following this look at how both parents share responsibility for caring their children. Thus, it has been proven that fathers are equally responsible for the upbringing of their children.

(Total words: 317)
(Written by Zuber Mansuri)

Answer 4: (Agreement: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood)
In the past, it was a common custom that the one who was responsible for the upbringing of children - was the mother only; the fathers' responsibility was to earn the livings and provide a good life. However, a change in the belief took place in the previous few years; nowadays, some people claim that fatherhood should be emphasised much more. Although some people see that fathers must contribute in the bringing up of children and it's not only mother's responsibility, other people still see that it's only mother's responsibility.

"Of course me and my husband, George!" said Miss Karmen when she was asked who was in charge of bringing up her child, she added, "Oh, I really cannot do this alone; my child needs both of us". If a child interacts and plays with his mother only, that will lead to improper dealing with other people including his dad. The fact that father for money and mother for upbringing is absolutely outdated.
A kid needs both the father and mother's care but father would be mostly busy at works so ultimately the mother would have to spend more time with the kind. But the father should spend as much time as possible with his kids after getting back from the work.

Actually, some people still adhere to their point of view regardless the prior information claiming that parents must contribute, yet in their way; each one is responsible for only one thing. We have an example, Robert Frans, a teacher in a high school in Australia; he said: "Why I have to tire myself more, it's my wife's own business". For me I actually think that fatherhood ought to be emphasised, but not as much as motherhood. I think mothers' share in upbringing should be more than that of fathers.

(Total words: 304)
(Written by Abdullah Hassan)

Answer 5: (Agreement: Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood)
In today's society, both parents play's an equal role in the family life to bring up the children. It is important to share their responsibilities equally to make their child as a good citizen of tomorrow. Hence, I strongly agree with the statement that looking after the children is the shared responsibility of the partners.

Firstly, in this advanced world, women are also educated as men are and in some cases, women are rather more talented than the men. It paves the way for them to work as well and be the breadwinners of the family. Moreover, nowadays, because of the high living expense and also in order to meet the basic needs of the children such as food, clothes, housing, adequate education and so in, it became mandatory for both members of the family to work.

Secondly, it is essential for a child to experience love and care from both father and mother to attain a good character. The idea is that the father needs to find leisure time to spend with the child and make him/her energetic by teaching outside sports instead of computer games. Likewise, the mother needs to take care of the behaviour and should teach good morals of life. As a result, the child will become healthy physically and emotionally.

On the other hand, there are many children in this world living with a single parent. Although they seem to be happier in front of the society, there would be something they lack in their personal life. If they were given an opportunity to share their feelings, definitely they will point out the values of family relationships. For instance, they must be sure that they would have done better in their life if they were brought up in a loving family with both mother and father.

To conclude, there is a saying that "Parents are the best role models for their children". Therefore, it is worth sharing their responsibilities among them to provide brighter future for their children.

(Total words: 333)
(Written by John Antony)

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+3 # Ade 2016-02-10 22:36
I wrote this in the 30 minutes time slot, so it has some flaws I left. May be I'll be able to help or maybe someone can read it my exam is tomorrow anyway.

Determining how to train children and how to share responsibilities among parents has been a point of major discussion and sometimes a dispute in families. Bringing up children is the duty of both parents and no parent should have an upper hand or less contribution in the upbringing of their child. Equal responsibilities means, there will be togetherness in the family, more financial stability of both parents and freedom for both parents to live a more balanced life.

In our present culture, the home is one of the most important avenue to teach a child how to model his life and when both parents train and discipline their children together, it gives the child an understanding of his parent's oneness. For instance, in my culture when a child misbehave, in most cases the parent aware of the misbehaviour will call the child to order simply by telling the child "I will tell your dad when he gets back from the office" or "just wait till your mother gets back from the market". Both parents will wait for each other, then scold or discipline the child as one. This is one area both parents share equal responsibility.

Another area where it is advantageous for parents to share responsibility is in the area of financing the child. The economy is not as simply structured or as one-sided as it was before where in most cases the mother is a stay at home mom and the father works. Nowadays, in most families both parents work and they split bills that arise from mortgages, groceries etc. This model should also be adapted in the child rearing. For example, my parents while growing us up split their children's school fees into equal halves as compared to their salaries and this eased a lot of financial stress on both of them which made it possible for both of them to seemingly have a form of financial freedom to achieve other things and was able to pursue other what they aspired to do in their lives with respect to funds.

Lastly, because my parents shared financial responsibilities and raised their children with equal level of influence and contribution, they were able to concentrate on other aspect of their lives. For example, my dad was able to badge his PhD because he was not saddled with the responsibilities of raising the children alone and my mum also achieved a lot while we were growing up. She was not limited to just raising children like some of her friends whose husband believed women were only meant to raise children. This even led such couples to depression. This reason and my personal experience with my family have made me a believer that parents should have equal duties in raising their children.
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0 # Kaveri 2016-01-16 07:45
In this competitive world both parents are working in many cases to upbringing their children and support their family. This arise many debates. Some people believe that the sole responsibility of women is to take care of their children while others believe that fathers are better parents. This essay delves with both these views and arrive to a logical conclusion.

On the one hand children spend more time with their mother during childhood so they are more attached to their mothers. Mothers can influence mostly on children’s character and they follow their mother because moms know their basic needs. Mother-child bonding is strong, for instance feeding, bathing, and helping them in doing home works, so they obey and follow their mothers rather than fathers. This view prove that mothers are better parenthood.

On the other hand some believe that fathers are better parent because they spend their time working outside to earn money for their livelihood. Since birth the child sees his/her father taking care and protect the family. So especially the male children follow his father and he stands for his family in future. Secondly there are many cases in absence of mother, father succeeded in bring up their children.

After analyzing both these views I feel that parental care is essential for children behavioral modification. Even though mother knows her child very well, father can also play inspiring role for his children. I strongly recommended that both father and mother should find time for their own children and make them better humans.
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+2 # Abby 2015-10-12 18:47
In our generation today people have set ideas on what is convenient when it comes to raising a family. Some say that gone are the days where women were solely responsible for up bringing their children, and that fathers should have their fair share of the responsibility. I totally agree with this notion that fatherhood ought to be given importance as much as motherhood.

In the past, it was customary for women to stay home and look after the children while the men went out to work and provide foods and shelter for the family. However the world has evolved since then. The barrier between men and women has gone lower which means, most things that only a man could do in the past is now also shared with women and vice versa. For one, women are also working nowadays and helping the men funding their family's needs.

I also want to point out that having a family is not a single person's job. First, a woman cannot get pregnant without a man which also comes to my second point that men are equally responsible in the relationship as women are. Furthermore, women should not be expected to nurture the child alone as the child's persona cannot be build properly from only one of the parents mentoring. In order for the child to receive full care, both parents should spend equal time with the child.

Sure there are single mothers out there who seem successfully raised their child alone. But, that is not a guarantee that a child feels complete inside since there is something missing in his or her life and that is the influence and the figure of a father. Moreover, there are things that a mother cannot give to a child that only a father can. A good example is the father's natural ability to protect and secure his family in any way possible.

Finally a child will be a better person if he or she is a product of two loving, responsible and nurturing parents who would do everything together to make sure that everything is alright. Someday, hopefully that child will be the same to his or her future family.
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