IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 31 - Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

You should write at least 250 words.


Model Answer 1:
In balancing the world economic growth, the underdevelopment of the third world nations has been drawn to the attention of the developed countries of the Western. Thus, governmental policies and interference in the agricultural business of the poorer nations were made to secure their dominant source of the economy. Many discussions among economists and politicians also put their focus on the other aspects. That is, to improve the health, education and trade for the developing countries. However, the improvements cannot be made by these countries, but more external assistance and aids should be done.

Because of the shortage of food supply, the people in poorer nations (i.e. Africa) are easily prone to disease, hunger and death. When natural or environmental disasters happen, they are threatening with their lives. Education cannot be well developed as a result of frequent droughts, famines and disease spreading. The other countries, while emphasising on the development of agriculture in the Third World, cannot really give the solution to the cyclical problem which has been existing for a long time. It is time to consider the consequences of all the waste of efforts in trying to help the economic growth of the Third World and to think from the other perspectives. The richer countries have the power to rebuild the Third World by taking care the essentials - health, education and trade. More aids for providing the medicine, educational needs and materials can be done by the richer countries. The assistance of trade and developing business in the poorer countries also can be of a great help to the poorer nations.

If the richer countries can be more serious about the essential issues of how a nation develops, and well consider the special situations and circumstances those poorer nations are facing, the improvements will be more efficiently made. The governments of developed countries are, in some ways, responsible - though not obliged - for the future of those developing countries.


(Approximately 324 words)
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Model Answer 2:
Education and health are fundamental factors for any nation. Research shows that the gap that exists between the level of education in rich and poor countries has a tendency to increase with the time. I completely agree that the governments of richer nations should step forward to help the poor nations to overcome the obstacles they face in areas like healthcare, education and trade.

Education, health and trade are interconnected with each other and that is why an increase in educational level will very likely to affect both health and trade.
Many industrialised rich countries have enough resources at their disposal in order to help poorer countries. Nowadays there are plenty organisations funded by prosperous countries, which focus on helping third world countries by sending workers and volunteers to the poor nations in order to help the development. Many even grant medical equipment and other necessary goods. Another way how rich countries help is by giving loans for development. However many governments refuse to give a financial aid due to the high risk involved.

But there is always a flip side of the coin and the government of such rich countries who help the poor nations should make sure that the fund they provide is utilised properly. Alternatively, they should take schemes like establishing schools, commercial places and hospitals in their authority rather than providing the fund to these poor nations.

In conclusion, governments should unite and take more responsibility for providing help to poor countries. Otherwise, the gap between poor and rich countries will continue to grow exponentially.
 

(Approximately 324 words)

( Written by - Oleg Gorbatenko)

 

Sample Answer 3:
Today’s world has been divided into developing and industrialised countries where the main difference between them is the amount of money that governments apply in important sectors such as education, health and commerce. Most of the poorer nations are buried in debts as a result of their unbalanced finances which are reflected in a poor health care, an unstructured education system and a weak international trade. This vicious cycle will continue indefinitely unless wealthier nations show interest in minimising the worldwide economic differences, as well as taking more responsibility for assisting unfortunate countries.

Most of the African countries live in inhuman conditions because of the extreme poverty, upheaval, hunger, disease, unemployment, lack of education and both inexperienced and corrupt administrations. The devastating consequences of the AIDS epidemic in those countries could improve if the infected populations receive free drugs to control the disease, have access to health professionals and get information on how to prevent its spread. But this can only be achieved through international help programs in which leaders of the world?s richest countries donate medicine and also send doctors and nurses to treat and educate those in need.

Moreover, most of the poor countries rely on selling agricultural products and raw material to rich nations and buying industrialised products from them which result in a huge financial deficit. Consequently,
they borrow a significant amount of money from the World Bank to try to improve their broken economies, but sometimes the money disappears with no significant changes and they cannot even pay the interest to the bank. Regarding this issue, last year the G8, which is comprised of leaders of the eight richest nations, decided to forgive billions of dollars worth of debt owed by the world?s poorest nations. In addition, they developed adequate loan programs to financially assist those countries.

In conclusion, leaders of the industrialised countries play an indispensable role in assisting developing nations to deal with essential areas such as health, education and trade. Also, their aid is the key to breaking the vicious cycle, which results in poverty and death.

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+4 # Priyanka Anchaliya 2016-05-18 07:01
Undeniably healthcare, education and trade are the cornerstones of a country’s economic and overall growth. The existing gap between the rich and the poor nations is mainly because of the lack of good healthcare, international trade facility and proper education in the later. Considering the importance these three important aspects in the growth of the country, I completely agree that rich nations should provide aid to the underdeveloped countries to improve their healthcare, trade and educational facilities and infrastructure.

Research has shown that due to inadequate supply of food and poor living conditions, the people in underdeveloped countries like Africa are more prone to diseases and have high fatality rate. Natural disasters like draughts and floods add to the woes of these people. If developed nations help in improving the basic living conditions, like adequate food supply, proper sanitation and basic healthcare, the government of poor nations can use their resources to resolve other challenges like agricultural development and ensuring law and order in the country.

Again, if poor countries get aid in basic education, it would not only help them to grow and prosper but would also contribute to the global economy in long run. Education consequently improves the health conditions and increases the living standards of the people. It would help reducing crime by making people aware of right and wrong, which in turn would allow the governments of poor countries to channel their resources for the economic growth of the country. Education is also vital for maintaining world peace and rich nations should provide support to the poor nations in this regards.

Finally if the rich countries take responsibility of basic needs of health, education and trade in the underdeveloped countries, it would build an atmosphere of peace and gratefulness among the nations of the world. In addition to the betterment of human race in general rich countries can benefit from the skilled people from these poor countries. A very good example of this can be seen in Afghanistan. After the war, when the USA and other countries sent help to Afghanistan to build schools and hospitals, the people of Afghanistan were highly benefitted and their living conditions were considerably improved, despite the ongoing conflicts in the region.

Therefore, I strongly agree that providing aid to the poor countries to improve their health, education and trade would be a very effective idea for all rich nations.
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