Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 43 - The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland


The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

    » You should write at least 150 words.
    » Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.
Academic IELTS writing task 1 sample 43

Sample Answer 1:  
The provided graph compares the male and female smokers between the years 1960 to 2000 in Someland. As is observed from the given presentation, over the 40 years the number of male smokers dropped significantly while the number of female smokers increased.

Initially, in 1960, 600 male out of 1000 smoked and the female smokers were less 100 in number in this year. Over the next 40 years, the number of male smokers decreased steadily and reached to just over 200 out of 1000 people. On the contrary, though the number of female smokers was always less than the male smokers, their number increased over time. In 2000, the male and female smokers’ number both got at around 200 in 1000 people.

In summary, Male smokers were higher in number than female smokers from 1960 to 2000 but while the number of male smokers decreased steadily, female smoker’s number increased and in 2000, the percentage or male and female smokers got almost same.

(Approximately 163 words)
( This model answer can be followed  as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Model Answer 2:
The provided line graph presents data on the male and female smokers per thousand people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. As an overall trend, it is obvious that the rate of male smoker decreased over the time while the female smokers’ rate increase in the given period of time.

According to the given line graph, the ratio of male smokers in Someland was much higher than that of $female in 1960. 600 men out of 1000, smoked in this year while the ratio of women smokers was less than 100 per thousand. However, the male smokers’ percentage kept on decreasing steadily over the time and an opposite trend could be observed among the women. After 20 years the percentages or male and female smoker in Someland were 48% and 31% respectively. Finally, in 2000, the percentages of male and female smokers became almost the same. In 2000, the male smokers’ ratio was 20%, which was a significant decline in the ratio of the male smoker, while it was 20% for women, which shows that the percentage of female ration doubled in 40 years. 

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0 # Sebastián Gómez Vidal 2016-03-06 20:34
The graph illustrates data about the number of smokers who lived in Someland over a 40 years period between 1960 and 2000. Figures shown are per 1000 people, e.g. the number of male and female smokers per one thousand people.

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there was a gradual downward trend in the number of male smokers whereas women showed a steady growth from 1960 to 1975. At this point female smokers started to slightly decrease until 2000. Another interesting point is that there were more men who liked to smoke than women over the whole period.

Looking at the details, as regards male smokers, they started at 60% in 1960, being the highest level of smokers over the 40 years. Then there was a steady drop to around 30% in 2000. Now with respect to female smokers, they began at approximately 10% in 1960, which meant that there were far less women smoking than men, in a ratio 1 to 6 in turn. For the period in question, at this point they grew by to 20% to 30% in 1975, having remained at this figure for the next decade, after which they witnessed a marginal decrease to around 20% in 2000.

Both genders tended to converge at a same value over the last part of the period, where men got a reduction of a third, passing from 600 out of 1000 people in 1960 to over 200 out of 1000 people in 2000, while women smokers slightly increased from 10% to 20%, what translated into a marginal increase by 100 females.
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0 # Nima 2015-08-08 15:15
The given graph depicts the ratio of smoking per 1000 people in somewhere from 1960 to 2000 for both genders with plummet for each 5 years.

As is provided as a census of a perusal in the presented line graph women had under 0.1 in 1960 but male had the most amount of this factor in 40 years with 60%. In 1965 number of smoker women increased noticeably and met 20% and continued this scenario until 1970 but in 1975 this ratio took-off and reached to 30% as summit for women. After 1975 women percentage slumped until 2000 and achieved 20% in 2000. On the contrarily men conformed subtractive scenario and declined monotonously until 2000 and met 25% in that year as nadir.

In conclusion, the most amount of gap between female and male smokers was 50% in 1960 and the least one was less than 5% in 2000. Number of male who used to smoke cigarette decreased more than 30% but this amount increased for female.
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