Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 4 - Average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories

» You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

» You should write at least 150 words.

IELTS Academic Writing task 1 sample 4

Model Answer 1:
The graph shows data between married men and women of the number of hours spent per week on unpaid work. At first glance at the chart, it is noticeable that from all the three categories (without children, with 1-2 children and with 3 or more children), married women spend more hours involved in unpaid work such as housework, gardening and childcare than expected from men.

Married women with children spend more time than without children as the chart shows while having more than three children have invested around 60 hours of unpaid work. This is probably due to the extra load of housework and childcare that is evidently needed to run such a big family.

Furthermore, though there are visible variations of the number of hours of unpaid work carried out by married women, there is no significant variation among all three categories for married men in terms of work hours that is not paid (30 or fewer hours). In fact, it is observed that married men with three or more children spent slightly less number of unpaid work hours. This might be due to the high requirement of commitment needed for a paid job to meet financial requirements for a big family.

In conclusion, married women with three or more children spent the highest number of hours, yet married women from all categories spent a dramatically higher number of hours for unpaid work than married men.

[Written by - Menu Anju ]

Tips for answering this Academic IELTS writing task 1:

1. Look at the question carefully. It asks you to compare the result shown for men and women. So you should not only mention the figures given in the graph. Rather you should use comparisons. An example of comparison is: "The number of unpaid working hours increases for women with the increase of their children's number but that does not affect the total unpaid works done by the men."

2. The question also asks you to suggest reasons for what you see. So you would require giving reasons possibly why the women work more unpaid works that men do and why their working hours in unpaid works increases with the number of total children.

3. There is an interesting fact in the result of the bar graph i.e. men with more than 3 children work even less for the unpaid jobs. Mention this interesting fact in your writing.

4. Since no past year or month is mentioned in this bar graph, your answer should be in present tense. Example: Women spend more time on such unpaid household works than men do.

Summary of the bar graph:
This graph shows the total hour of unpaid jobs like child rearing, household works, cooking, cleaning, gardening etc done by male and female per week. The result of this graph is not related to the paid job of men of women. The result suggests that females spend more time on such jobs than men do. Again, female with more children works more hours than other females. Interestingly the numbers of hours men work in such unpaid works remain almost same regardless of their children number.

Model Answer 2:
The given column graph elucidates the unpaid work done by both married men and women having different numbers of children. A cursory glance is adequate to mention that most women, with or without children, have to do the  unpaid household works more than men and more children means more work for women.

As is seen in the given illustration, married females who do not have any child do around  30 hours of unpaid work weekly, while,  male from the same category do only 18 hours of such work. Whilst, men who have one or two children spend an equal amount of time for household  works as do the males without children, this is in contrast nearly fifty hours for women. In the case of women, who nurture more than three offspring, spend the highest hours on unpaid works -58 hours  per week. Men on the other hand, surprisingly do fewer household works with the increase of their child number.

[Word count = 152, Written by - Arora]

Sample Answer 3:   
The given column graph shows information on the amount of unpaid works done by men and women of different categories.

As is presented in the illustration, married women who don't have children do the unpaid-works (gardening, child care and household works) 30 hours per week whereas married men do the similar unpaid jobs for about 18 hours per week. Women, who have one or two children do such work for 50 hours/week but the men from the same category do only 17hours (approximately) each week. The women who have more than 3 kids seem to work the highest amount of unpaid works per week and that is nearly 60 hours. Surprisingly male from the same category work even less; amounting only 16 hours (approximately) of unpaid works.

In summary, women do the most of the unpaid jobs compared to men and with the increased number of children this workload for women increases. This is possibly because more men than women get busy at paid job and women stay home more than men do. As a consequence, women have to do more unpaid jobs like childcare, gardening, cooking and household tasks than men.

(Approximately 191 words)   

( This model answer can be followed  as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Sample Answer 4:
The given line graph compares the hours of non-paid jobs done by male and female with different numbers of children in an average week. As is observed from the graphs, women worked significantly more hours than men for the household works like child caring, gardening etc. Also, the number of hourly works done as unpaid works got higher with the increase of child number.

As is presented in the line graph, married women work around 30 hours per week for household unpaid works while the men from same category work for only 18 hours. The works done by females with 1-2 children per week is more than 50 hours and with 3 plus children the work done by females is 60 hours. Interestingly, the volume of unpaid jobs done by males does not change with the number of kids they have except for the men with more than three kids who works even less unpaid household works.

In conclusion, we can say that the volume of unpaid works like household works and child caring increases for women with the increase of their children's number but for men, this remain the same. And female works significantly more hours for that type of household works than the men do.     

(Approximately 208 words)  

Sample Answer 5:
The given bar graph depicts the average hours of unpaid work done in a week by different categorised people such as married women and men without children, with 1-2 children and with more than 3 children. The first point to note is that men do almost an equal number of hours of work in all three categories.

Men occupied with unpaid works around 18 hours per week in the given groups. On the other hand, women of the given two categories were engaged with 3 fold hours of men’s unpaid work. That is, 50 and 55 hours per week by married women with 1-2 children and with more than 3 children respectively. Interestingly, married women without children have done almost half of it that is 30 hours per week.

To sum up, it is clear from the graph that married women were doing more hours of unpaid work compared to married men irrespective of their number of children.

(Approximately 208 words | Written by - Jayesh Joseph)  

Model Answer 6:
The given diagram presents information on average weekly unpaid working hours of married men and women according to their family members’ number (without children, 1-2 children, with 3 children). It is clear that women spend more time doing the unpaid works than men do. The unpaid works mainly involve household and child upbringing works like housework, taking care of children, and gardening.

As is illustrated in the diagram, more the number of children the more unpaid working hours could be observed in the case of women and the reverse scenario is true for unpaid working hours of men. Women without children work about 30 hours of unpaid works per week while it is about 17 hours for men without children. The unpaid working hours increases significantly when a married woman has children. For 1-2 children this working hour stands at over 50 hours per week and for 3+ children it reaches to about 60 hours. Interestingly, the weekly unpaid working hours for married men decrease very slightly with the increase of children in the family. While a man works for about 17 hours of unpaid tasks weekly if has no child this working hour decreases to nearly 16 when he has children.

This is a possibility because women most of the time stay at home and do more household and child-rearing tasks than men do. Men, on the other hand, works outside and do less household related tasks. Again married women with children need to work more on such tasks than married women without children.

 [Written by – Israa]

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0 # I.H. Robi 2016-05-11 18:14
Is it right to write conclusion in WT1?
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+2 # PJ 2016-04-29 18:40
The bar graph illustrates the duration of weekly unpaid works done by married men and women of three categories: with 1 to 2 children, with 3 and more children and with no child. Unit used is in the data is hours per week. Overall, it is noticeably clear that the more unpaid works are done by the mothers.

Among the given three categories, married women do more household and other unpaid works per week than men. The unpaid work includes childcare, housework and gardening.

Looking at the graph, it is prevalent that in families with 3 or more children and 1 to 2 children, mothers do the extra works with an average of less than 60 hours on both cases which are the highest marks in the graph. While in families with no children women only do 30 hours of unpaid work.

On the other hand married men just do under 20 hours of unpaid work in all categories which is far less than that of women. It is also seen that the more the number of children, the lesser unpaid work is done by the fathers.
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+2 # Sami Satti 2016-04-28 01:22
The given bar graph represents the duration of unpaid works done by people of different marital status in a typical week. It is obvious and clearly evident that married women for all the three given categories do the most unpaid work irrespective of the number of children they have. It is quite understandable pertaining to the fact that women take part in household works more than the men would do.

In case of married men and women without any children, married women work for nearly 30 unpaid hours which is comparatively higher than the number of unpaid hours (18 hours) worked by married men. There is substantial growth (nearly 2 times) in number of unpaid hours (nearly 50) of moms with 1-2 children, however, the number of unpaid hours for dads with 1-2 children is unchanged. The growth in the number of unpaid hours for moms with 3 or more children is highest with 60 hours per week which is almost 3 times higher than those of married men with 3 or more children.

In summary, women work considerably more hours of unpaid works than men. Men, regardless of their marital status and number of children, work the same hours of unpaid works per week.
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0 # Sohana 2015-12-07 23:29
`This might be due to the high requirement of commitment needed for a paid job to meet financial requirements for a big family. `should we use this kind of sentences which expresses personal opinion, not the data?
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+2 # IELTS Mentor 2015-12-08 11:34
Sohana,

Nice question. You should not actually add any personal opinion in your Writing Task 1 answer unless there is an obvious clue in the given data.
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+5 # Rahul Dawer 2015-10-11 23:34
The vertical graph exhibits the information about the unpaid work which is done by two different genders in every week.

Having the proper glance on the graph, the most striking feature is that most of the unpaid works were done by women as compared to Adams. It is interesting to see that mostly woman who have 3+ children invested 60 hours in an average week on the unpaid work. This figure seems like a tall tower. On the flip side, eves who have no children spent just 30 hours on unpaid work than other females.

Secondly, men who have less than two children and who do not have any children both spent just 20 hours in an average week while Adams with 3 plus children spent under 20 hours. Interestingly, women with 3 children spent most hours in unpaid work while men with 3 children spent lowest time in unpaid work.

Overall, mostly unpaid work done by women rather than adams while women who have 3 or more children had done more work than other females.
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+1 # Alex 2016-11-01 10:09
What do you mean by saying ADAMS... I think it is not appropriate.
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+1 # Nima 2015-07-06 15:03
The given bar chart depicts the average hours of unpaid work per week in different sections for both genders. As is presented in the provided diagram, percentage housework and gardening for women is dependent on the number of children. For example women have 30 hours free work with no child in average and this amount for men is nearly 20 hours. Due to number of children this time for women jumped suddenly and for 1 or 2 children reached to more than 50 hours. This number rocketed to well over 60 hours approximately for 3 and more than 3 children for women but this amount for men keeps fluctuating near 15 hours in different number of children.

In summary, the time of unpaid work for married women is increased according to number of children but men hours is almost stable for variety number of children. This diagram shows women is busier than men and are more engaged with the household works.
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+2 # Dona 2015-07-05 21:26
The bar graph gives information about the average hours of unpaid work within a week done by people in different categories, such as married male and female without children, with children of 2, and with children above 3.

As expected, without children at home occupies only 30 hours per week of their time doing household choirs for women while 18 hours only for married men. Having a maximum of 2 children at home consumes 52 hours per week of married women, since unpaid works increases at home, but interestingly, for married men, the number of hours they used for household jobs remained the same as to without children. It is apparent, when children multiply, there is also an increase of 9 hours of unpaid works for married women compared to having 2 children, while married men, there is a significant decrease of 2 hours compared to having 2 children.

In conclusion, married women do a lot of household works per week especially when children are doubled or multiplied whereas, married men has the constant average of hours per week.
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-5 # Ayzek 2015-06-05 01:56
Can I also add Intro:
The given chart depicts information about number of unpaid work hours according to gender and number of offspring.
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+1 # IELTS Mentor 2015-01-14 14:24
A good response. But there were two corrections in spelling:

1. "Which" instead of "Who" in paragraph 2.
2. "Stands" instead of "Stand" in Final Paragraph.

Thanks.
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+12 # Darwin 2015-01-14 10:12
Can i answered it like this:

The bar chart compares the number of unpaid working hours spend per week between married men and women in three different categories, namely without children, with 1-2 children, and with 3 children and above.

It is clear that the number of hours spend for unpaid activities such as babysitting the children or doing the household activities in the married women groups are far higher than the men, in all the categories.

In the without children group, the average hours spend by the women are just under 30 hours per week, while the men only spend about 18 hours. But then it is noticed that in the married men or women category which have 1 or 2 children, the figure for the women is far higher than the previous figure, as it stand at slightly above 50 hours. Meanwhile, the men’s figure in this group have the same number as the previous one.

The number of hours that are spent by the women in the last group is considered as the highest among the other, as they spend approximately 58 hours for the unpaid work every week. In contrast, the figure for the men in this group is the lowest compare to the other, which stands at around 17 hours.
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