IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 40 - Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer 1:As a result of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge salaries. Just like movie stars, they live extravagant lifestyles with huge houses and cars.

Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons or research scientists or even leading politicians who have the responsibility of governing the country. However, sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution to society a person makes, or the level of responsibility he or she holds. Instead, they reflect the public popularity of the sport in general and the level of public support that successful stars can generate. So the notion of ‘fairness’ is not the issue.

Those who feel that sports stars’ salaries are justified might argue that the numbers of professionals with real talent are very few, and the money is recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful. Competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in their relatively short career. The pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of the spotlight. There is a huge number of sports persons compared to those who have become successful and having a huge salary. It takes lots of practice, skills and time to become a sports icon. Again Sports personality like Sachin Tendulkar, Tiger Woods, Shane Warne inspires the new generation to be attracted to the games they play.  So all of these factors may justify the huge earnings of the sports personality.

The first reason why I think that such high salary is deserved by famous athletes and entertainers because we all need them. Entertainment plays an essential role in our everyday's life. We need to relax, watching TV with our favourite TV stars or favourite football players. Entertainment is one of the best ways to eliminate stress and tension and leave all troubles behind. For example, I can not stay home all day long without watching TV. So, basically, I believe that famous athletes and entertainers have such high salaries because we need them. They like doctors for our minds and soles. Scientists say that people usually spend the same amount of money for their food and entertainment. I think this fact tells a lot.

The second reason for this is that famous athletes have to work hard in order to get good results. I am sure that achievements they make are the result of hard work, persistence and pain. They sometimes risk their lives and health. For example, I am a big fan of L. Amstrong, the most famous cyclist in world's history. He faced probably, the most challenging difficulty in his life, cancer. He was very young for this disease. Amstrong was in his early twenties when he found out about it. I read a book about his life, and what impressed me were his words after his victory in France. He said: "Cancer was the best thing that ever happened to me ". He defeated the disease only because he believed in himself and did not give up. I think such person deserves to have a high salary and be loved by many people throughout the world.

Personally, I think that the amount of money such sports stars make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie stars, but at the same time, it indicates that our society places more value on the sport than on the essential professions and achievements.

(Approximately 587 words)

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Model Answer 2:
Cristiano Ronaldo, David Beckham, Tiger woods are some famous sports professionals who earn a great deal. The reason behind these great deals is the constant media attention on them.  However, it is true that they do not contribute too much to a society like doctors and scientist.

Sports professionals who earn a great deal of money are the hard workers in their respective field.  They use all their efforts for the success of their one and of their teams.  The person with real talent in the field are very few that is why they worth the deal. Even more, A player has a short career and he is tested in that period with the massive competition on the respective field. The pressure of media is intense and there is no privacy in their life. So, this can also justify the huge earnings.

However, Sports professional does not contribute more to the society. Other high profile professionals like doctors make a great contribution to the society by treating sick and injured people. Furthermore, scientists who work for the new invention and climate change also contribute more for the society. If we favour these points then they must have a great deal of money. However, the salary of sports professional is not determined by the percentage they contribute to society.

Personally, I think the mega deal of money sports professional received is more justified than the huge earnings of the movie stars. This also points out the importance and value of sports than on other professions and achievements.

(Approximately 250 words)

[ Answer by Sunil Pandit ]
 

Model Answer 3:
Nowadays, sports professionals are obtaining more attention among people from all over the world. Media is one of the main reasons that make a person get fame in no time. So the sports persons are being treated like celebrities worldwide. To give a piece of one's mind, talented sports persons should be compensated with more pay.

To be at loggerheads, some might feel this suggestion is unfair. It is a fact that not all the sports stars are talented than the people who works in other esteemed professions such as doctors, scientists and politicians. They play an important role in the growth of their nation. Whereas sports persons play for themselves by using their country's name only as a label, sometimes they bring success and fame for the whole nation. Because of media, people give keen attention to sports celebrities and treat other professions scornfully.

In an honour bound, those who have mere talents must be paid with a huge amount of money. It is indeed that not all sports persons are successful in their careers. People who have the audacity and hard working nature are the one who relishes with the victory. Even though they play for their personal goal, achievements they make in sports also make the nation very proud. Considering this reason, it is fully justified to let a sports person to earn a great deal of money.

To conclude, the sports professionals with suffice tendency to accomplish something in their career are justified to acquire huge earnings. It clearly depicts that, sports professions has more value than other essential professions around the world.

(Approximately 265 words)

[ Answer by Yazhini Venugopal ]
 

Model Answer 4:
Nowadays, famous athletes earn huge amount of money while even great scientists’ income can hardly reach to one-tenth of them. People have been sharply polarised by this issue; hence, few people can be found in the middle position. But what do each group state?

Advocates of talented sportsmen claim they are unique in their field. They can absorb the attention of hundreds of millions to TV screens as a consequence of their brilliant performance. Therefore, either the manager of matches or team owners can advertise in prime time or on their jerseys and make fortunes. In economic terms, supply and demand dictate commodities prices in the market. If a strong demand and a severe shortage exist for these heroes, why should they undervalue themselves? After all, this is how capitalism works.

On the opposite front, a vast crowd feels this reality is an injustice. They argue that those who are high achievers in other fields are unique, too. Furthermore, they compare the net income of some gifted scholars with mediocre football players and the outcome is awful in their viewpoint. Surely, all scientists don’t earn the same, but even Noble laureates earn less than sports celebrities. For instance, one of my genius colleagues complains non-stop, comparing his salary with a renowned superstar, Ronaldo. Although he has a good wage in comparison with our coworkers, he needs to save all his earnings to reach to Ronaldo’s weekly income level.

All in all, I think both parties have some elements of truth in their remarks. Nonetheless, the reality, however, harsh it is, will not vary unless the economic system evolves. Capitalism is not a matter of morality. To make it ethical, in my point of view, a tax code with no loopholes should be in place which has higher rates for those with multimillion monthly packages to compensate this bitter situation and dedicate this money to the well-being of humanity.

(Approximately 265 words)

[ Answer by Ali Kazemian ]

Model Answer 5:
There is no hesitation in saying that celebrities like film stars and sports stars are paid considerably high amount of money than those who are in important professions like bureaucracy, doctors and engineers.

Generally, Sport starts, apart from excelling in their game, they also entertain a large number of people. This naturally gets the attention of the public and the media. So they become very popular. Commercial product manufacturers take advantage of this popularity and they use these famous personalities to promote their product by paying ample amount of money. A great example for this is Sachin Tendulkar, A famous cricketer in India, who is treated as the god of cricket. He acted in many advertisement films supporting numerous mercenary brands. Most of his income is out this job than batting in the field. This proves that the celebrities earn more money by influencing society than doing their own job.

On the other hand, the main reason for the people in crucial professions is not paid as much as sports stars are due to lack of identification. These people normally stick to their own job and most importantly the outcomes of their jobs are not entertaining. Also, media doesn’t show interest in focusing their work. Even if a documentary is telecasted on their achievements, people just watch and ignore it. A great example of this is Mr Vishweswar, who was a chief architect of one of the major irrigation projects in India. In his project, the design of the reservoir is so amazing that it has become the key resource of water for thousands of hectors of cultivating the land. Though his achievement contributed major role in the eradication of poverty in south India by reducing the cost of farming, he was not paid any extra money for this. This proves that people can’t become wealthy by helping the society.

In conclusion, I strongly feel that the attitude of the people should change. They should identify the real heroes. Every individual should realise that the people who give benefits to the society should get paid more that those who entertain them.

(Approximately 347 words)

[ Answer by Ramesh NV ]

Model Answer 6:
There are many disputes over the high salaries of the top sports people. Although reasons can be given to unjustified this, personally I believe that sports professional deserve this high wages.

Many people believe that top sports persons earn too much money that they don’t deserve due to two main reasons. First reason: people believe that sports professional do not provide a vital service to communities like other important professional do. Football players, for example, earn enormous salaries by simply kicking a ball is something they often refer. The second reason: while life would be difficult without doctors, engineers and other vital professionals, people could all live happily without professional sports star.

On the other hand, I would argue that there are many causes to support the high income in sport. Firstly, people who reach the highest level in sport must be highly skilled and talented. They take training and practise every day to reach this level of professionalism. So, Hard working and dedicated workers deserve high wages. Secondly, the sports professional is more susceptible to serious injury. If they get hurt, they need more money to recovery and support their families meanwhile. Also, they will not be playing the sports they play for the rest of their life. Most athletes retire after the age of forty or sometimes even earlier. Finally, sports salaries are only high because sports fans are willing to pay much money to watch their favourite stars.

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against sports professional high salaries, but I believe that they deserve the salaries they currently earn.

(Approximately 263 words)

[ Answer by Safa Ahmed ]
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0 # Jakaria Khan 2016-11-23 04:13
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-1 # Ramu 2016-04-20 16:58
Really thanks for your help.
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+2 # Bilal Shabbir 2016-01-02 19:29
Sportsmen have great influences and contributions for making their country proud globally. It is observed generally that, victorious player get more and great figure in salaries as well as winning prize money on performance during sports competition.

Especially in my country, sports professionals are encouraged with providing large amount of finance by government to acquire maximum output from players precisely in Cricket and Football. Furthermore, sports representatives spend their whole life in training, hardworking or playing matches to accomplish their aim for rising their country to sky which can be compensate with financial rewards. Moreover, they are on figure counting as compare to other important professional like army or cabinet members.

On the contrary, player begins to advertise or present (marketing) domestic or international product offered by companies for the mean of handsome money and also take advantages of their fame to secure more money which is purely differed from their professions. For instant: Teacher, Army or politicians couldn’t grab the audience successfully to advertise the product because they are not as famous as compare to sportsmen. In this regards rest of professionals has right to think adversely, this approach need to be justify that is unfair with other professionals.

In conclusion, as sportsman has their own status and value, they need to concentrate towards their goal and look to achieve the honor for country rather than focusing to deal with money. With this kind of activity, opposite thought by other significant professionals would be eliminated and conflict thinking would be resolved.
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+2 # Gaurav Bhagat 2015-09-30 17:31
Thanks for helping saloni :)
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+2 # Sonam 2015-08-14 09:44
Hi, I need your help. Just want to ask that how can I improve writing skills. First I have weak knowledge in vocabulary
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+1 # Alex 2015-08-25 05:52
I think you should read more (books, articles, essays, etc.) And learn those words which you don't know.
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