Graph Writing # 182 - Pupils attending four secondary school

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Table:

» You are advised to spend about  20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» You should write at least 150 words.

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Secondary School Attendance

 

Model Answer 1:
The table data illustrates changes in students' choices of secondary schools throughout a nine-year period commencing from 2000.  

Overall, it can be seen that voluntary-controlled schools and community schools were the most popular in 2000 and 2009, respectively.

To begin with, more than half of the total pupils went to voluntary-controlled schools in 2000. The figure regarding community schools was just 12 percent - equal to that of specialist schools. At the same time, grammar schools represented just under one-fourth of students.

After five years, the proportion of learners attending community schools increased by 20 percent and further surged to well over 50% in the year 2009. An opposite trend could be observed in the case of voluntary-controlled schools as their figure dipped to 38% in 2005 and 20% in 2009.

Grammar and specialist schools also saw declines in attendance but it is less noticeable. The percentage of pupils in grammar schools dropped marginally as time went by, becoming 11 percent in 2005 and then exactly 10 percent by the end of the given period. Meanwhile, the figure decreased by half in specialist schools throughout the years, standing at 12 percent in 2009.

[Written by - Nguyen Thuong Vu]

 


Sample Answer 2:
The given table presents the percentages of students who chose four different schools in three different years in secondary level. As an overall trend, Voluntary-controlled Schools were the most popular among secondary level students in 2000 while Community Schools gained its popularity among the pupils in 2009.

As can be seen, more than half of the secondary students attended Voluntary-controlled Schools in 2000 while Grammar Schools stood at the second position with 24% pupils. Remaining 24% students were split equally between Specialists Schools and Community Schools. After five years, almost one-third pupils joined Community Schools which showed a 20% increase, while 38% students went to Voluntary-controlled schools, making it still the first choice of the secondary students. The students’ participation decreased by 5% and 1% in Grammar Schools and Specialised Schools respectively in this year. Finally, in 2009, there was a hike in the percentage of pupils who attended Community School which made it the most popular school type in this year. The percentage of attendants of other three schools dropped and all of them managed to gain 42% students in this year with 20% in Voluntary-controlled schools and remaining 22% in other two school types.

In summary,  Community Schools were preferred by most of the students in 2009 and Voluntary-controlled Schools were popular in 2005 but not in 2009.

[Written by - Daniel]

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Gleb
The information that is displayed in the table is the comparison of pupils attending four different types of secondary level schools from 2000 to 2009.

According to the table, community schools, at the end of the period, almost reflect the proportion of voluntary-controlled school's initial stage and became the most popular among schoolchildren by 2009, meanwhile other schools’ student attendance decreased.

The attendance of voluntary-controlled schools dropped from 52% to 20% over 9 years, though during the first half of the decade, these schools were the most popular type of school. On the contrary, the popularity of community schools rocketed from 12% to 58% - approximately five times higher just in 9 years.

As more and more pupils seemed to be interested in community schools, the attendance of grammar schools, specialist schools and voluntary controlled schools decreased. Grammar schools’ student attendance percentage dropped by 50% by the end of the term. Specialist schools kept the drop to a minimum level - by 2%. Finally, voluntary-controlled secondary schools were hugely popular among students are they received more than 50% of pupils in 2000. But it dropped significantly and got only 20% students in the year 2009.

Harry
It is very good.