IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample 841 - Excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Some people think that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers' writing and reading skills.

Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Model Answer 1:
It is true that the heavy use of computers and cell phones would have a negative impact on young people. However, I am not totally convinced that it would necessarily deter their writing and reading skills.

On one hand, relying too much on computers and mobile phones would effect on teenagers not to become proficient in some basic skills. Since computers and mobile phones come with a word processor accompanied with spellchecker, teenager's handwriting will probably suffer. For instance, young people who excessively depend on computers or mobile phones may not be able to write a letter by hand. In addition, reading through computers and mobile phones do not encourage teenagers to read long stories or high volume research books. They do not develop a reading habit that enables them to broaden their knowledge. Furthermore reading long passages through these devices could be very harmful to their eyes.

On the other hand, I believe that for some reasons, computers and cell phones would benefit young people's reading and writing abilities. Firstly, reading through computers and cell phones engage young people in learning and grasping knowledge. The ease of access to the information makes reading more interesting. For example, many of us stop reading a certain book because its introduction put him or her off continuing. While by surfing the Internet we can find the information that we interested on without a need to read the whole book. Secondly, using computers and mobile phones improve some writing skills, which are useful in future jobs such as word processors for making reports, power point program, making notes in telephone or even learn the meaning or the spelling of a word that we have never come across.

In conclusion, it seems to me that depending too much on computers and cell phones would bring both benefits and drawbacks.

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I see several important grammatical errors, and in an argument essay, you should use modals, while you did not. And, in conclusion, you have to give your view, but it is very short.