IELTS Essay 1190 - Certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.



Sample Answer: [Agreement]

Crimes, in many countries, have gone beyond a tolerable rate and it is a common practice to put convicted people in prisons. A segment of society opines that not all crimes are equal and the repercussion of harsh sentence for all offences is uncivilised. They outline the need for unpaid community service as punishment for mild-offenders and youngsters and I also believe that certain offenders should be given non-custodial sentences.

The predominant reason for me to believe in voluntary community service like cleaning streets, planting trees, and working for charity instead of the prison sentence is that many offenders are not born criminals, and circumstances often push them to commit a transgression. Besides, when such unpremeditated convicts are expelled from society, they incline to re-offend in isolation as there is none to accept them. Apart from this, juvenile delinquents should be rehabilitated by indulging them in community services. A recent study reveals that many youngsters who had been in prison for a long time often end up becoming even bigger criminals.

However, brutal offenders who commit heinous crimes like premeditated murder, vandalism, abduction, hijacking, rapes and so on should be punished to set examples in society. Thus, the background of a criminal and the motif of a crime should be considered. For instance, if a teenager steals food from a store as his mother is starving is a completely different crime than someone robbing an old lady and stabbing her violently. The former deserves a second chance while the latter should be imprisoned.

To recapitulate, someone with no previous record of crime and a sensible reason for minor misconduct should be treated differently than a serial killer. The objective of the law is to maintain peace in society, not to punish people. Thus unpaid community service is a great option to let some convicted lament their crime and do something good for society.

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Aminul Santo
How has he written like this!
Henry
There is a grammatical mistake in the sentence "Thus unpaid community services is a great option to let ....".

The phrase "unpaid community services" is a plural noun. So the verb following the phrase should be 'are', and not 'is'.

Sinclair
It is a singular noun since it denotes a collective of services, not individual services.
Muhammad Rashad
Nowadays, some people contemplate that some inmates of a specific category should be asked to do social service instead of their jail term. I totally agree with this. However, it should be confined to a certain type of convicts and the whole process should be monitored very closely. In this essay, I will be defending my viewpoint.

First of all, there are a few violations of law, which happens unintentionally or due to the lack of knowledge about them. Although there are severe punishments for these, people committing these should not be penalized with imprisonment, rather, they should be given a chance to learn from their mistakes and be law-abiding citizens in the future. Citing an example, a year ago, a youth in a European country was convicted for littering the highway and asked to clean one segment of the highway for a week. This is an exemplary punishment system that many other countries around the world should follow.

It is a common myth that jails produce more trained criminals. Up to some extinct, it is true, as the company of jailbirds trailed under serious crimes becomes the mentors of newcomers. In order to put a stop to this kind of training, authorities should make the prison a place to learn and develop. Inmates should be equipped with new skills and a passion not to be convicted again. This can be done by assigning them the volunteer jobs like helping the old in old age homes, visiting the patients in hospitals and teaching the children.

By way of conclusion, I will reaffirm my insurmountable contend that prisoners, who are put behind the bars owing to petty matters, should be given some social work instead.

RLK
If I were this writer, no doubt I will be granted 9 band score for my writing skill. Astonishing...
Duc Tran Hong
Such a great essay of you has fully demonstrated the 9-pts-skill of the writer. Highly appreciate by Duc from Vietnam with respect.
SuperMark
Amusing *Put INTO bars* :)