Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 20 - The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Column Graph:

»You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

»You should write at least 150 words.

Figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

Table - the figures for imprisonment in five countries

Sample Answer 1:
The bar graph shows the number of detainees in five countries - Britain, Australia, New Zealand, US and Canada between 1930 and 1980. Overall, Canada had the highest number of prisoners in 1930 while Great Britain had the least, but after 50 years, the number of prisoners decreased in Canada and the United States had the highest prisoners.

Initially, in 1930, Canada had 120 thousand prisoners and that was the highest number of inmates among the five countries. There were 100 thousand prisoners both in the US and New Zealand. Again, Australia had around 70 thousand prisoners and Great Britain had only 30 thousand prisoners and that was the lowest. After a decade, prisoners’ number in Britain remained almost the same while the number decreased in Australia, New Zealand and Canada. But this year the total number of prisoners increased in the US by 30 thousand and reached to 130 thousand. In 1950, the prisoners’ number increased in Britain and slightly decreased in Australia and New Zealand. On the other hand, the prisoner in Canada increased and got highest among the five countries and decreased in the US. A similar trend in terms of prisoner numbers in these countries could be observed after a decade. Finally, in 1980, the prisoners’ number in these countries increased except in Australia. The US had the highest number of prisoners in this year and Great Britain, Canada and New Zealand had more than 80 thousand prisoners in this year.

In summary, over the 50 years period, the crime and imprisonment number got worse in US and Britain while Australia, Canada and New Zealand did some progress. In 1980, Australia had the least number of prisoners which indicate their improvement in law and order.

( This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Sample Answer 2:
The table chart compares the numbers of prisoners from 1930 to 1980 in five different countries, namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, the United States and Canada. At a glance at the graph reveals that imprisonment figure in the USA and UK climbed over the period and in Canada, Australia, New Zealand, it actually declined.  

It is clearly seen that the United States had the highest number of inmates. Also, Britain had the lowest figure in 4 out of 6 years. In 1930, the number of prisoners in the United  States was the highest, with 120 thousand prisoners, then this number increased significantly to reach a peak of 140 thousand in 1980. By contrast, Britain had the lowest figure of prisoners until 1970, then the figure jumped suddenly to reach 90 thousand.

Canada had the highest number of imprisonment in 1930 and 1960 with nearly 140 thousand people in each year.In 1970 the number of prisoners in Great Britain, New Zealand and Australia was same, about 70 thousand people. In 1980, 50 thousands of people in New Zealand were put in prison which was the lowest figure in this year.

( Written by  - Safa Ahmed )

 

Sample Answer 3:
The bar chart depicts the number of prisoners in thousands, in five different countries, namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada during a period of 50 years commencing from 1930. Overall, the graph gives an impression that, imprisonment rate in the USA and UK escalated over the time while in Canada, Australia, New Zealand, it actually decreased.

As is evident in the presentation, Great Britain had the lowest number of imprisonment throughout the initial 40 years till 1980. Interestingly, Britain had witnessed a steady growth in figures, which started from around 30000 in the year 1930 and reached around 70000 in the year 1970. By contrast, the United States had the maximum number of criminals throughout the entire span of years except in the first decade, which is 1930. Moreover, in the year 1980, United States had to imprison the highest number of citizens in the entire period, which accounted for around 130000.

It is apparent from the graph that the crime rate in Canada had fallen gradually and steadily, from 120000 people in 1930 to a significantly less 90000 people in 1980. However, except for the years, 1930 and 1980, Australia had considerably less number of jailing and the New Zealand had always positioned as top three consistently just behind Canada and the United States.

( Written by  - Anoop Asokan )

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0 # Rojan 2016-07-31 05:42
I want to ask a question. In the first sample, it does not show full data and only makes comparisons. Is it necessary to show full data?
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0 # Keat Sopovthyda 2017-11-27 07:12
No need to show specific data.
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-2 # IELTS Mentor 2016-08-01 13:57
It is better to show comparison and contrast, where relevant and presenting main data of the chart.
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+1 # Siddharth Trivedi 2016-07-18 12:10
Dear Mentor, here in question - it's mentioned "BETWEEN 1930 AND 1980", which means 50 years or 5 decades but in the given table, 6 BAR CHARTS were shown. So which one is correct or what to follow?
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+6 # Philomina 2016-03-29 12:57
The bar chart compares the number of prisoners in five different countries namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada during five decades commencing from 1930. The figure of imprisonment is given in thousand and Canada and the US had far more prisoners in this given period than other countries.

In 1930, the highest number of prisoners was in Canada, while the lowest was in Great Britain. By 1980 the highest numbers of imprisoned people were in the United States. However, the least number of prisoners were in Australia in this year. In 1930 the number of people behind bars in Great Britain was around only 30,000 and it increased during the fifty years to reach approximately 83,000. On the other hand, Australia and New Zealand had about 70,000 and 100,000 prisoners respectively in 1930 and by 1980 and the number of prisoners declined to around 50,000 and 85,000 consecutively. Furthermore, in 1970, the number of prisoners was the same, roughly 65 thousand prisoners in Great Britain, Australia and New Zealand, whereas, the United States and Canada, represented the highest number of sentenced people during the five decades.
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0 # lmao 2017-11-05 08:57
Quoting Siddharth Trivedi:
Dear Mentor, here in question - it's mentioned "BETWEEN 1930 AND 1980", which means 50 years or 5 decades but in the given table, 6 BAR CHARTS were shown. So which one is correct or what to follow?
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0 # Philomina 2016-03-29 12:45
Dear mentor, I'd like to ask which one is correct? - to repeat each time prisoner or whatever, or I can right the numbers only.
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+4 # Arko 2016-08-01 13:59
Usually, you do not need to repeat all the time but write a few times so that the examiner can recall what number you are talking about.
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-1 # IELTS Mentor 2016-04-02 04:42
Both would be correct. We would advise you not to repeat the same word over and over again and using numbers.
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+20 # Rajinder Singh 2015-02-27 13:42
The supplied bar graph compares the number of detainees in five different countries, namely - Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada in 5 decades.

As in presented in the illustration, initially Canada had higher number of offenders than that of other countries but after 1960, the highest prisoners were in the USA. First of all, Canada had 120 thousand prisoners in 1930 while Australia and the United States each had 100 thousand. In the Great Britain, there were the lowest number of convicted criminals and this number was only around 30 thousand. In Australia, it was just around 70 thousand. However, in 1940, the United States had a higher count of detainees while Canada had the second largest count of prisoners. Moreover, Canada had a greater influx of prisoners, which was 116 thousand, than other countries in 1950. In addition, the United States had approximately 120 thousand prisoners in 1960 while Canada had about 100 prisoners which indicated a decrease in Canada. Interestingly from 1940 to 1960, prisoners' numbers in the rest of the countries were almost half of that in the Canada. Almost an equivalent number of prisoners were in Great Britain, Australia and New Zealand in 1970. Besides, the huge disparity was noticed in the number of prisoners between the United States and Australia in 1980. The data also shows that Australia had the lowest number of prisoners in 1980, which indicates the improvement in law and order.
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