Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 37 - The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Line Graph:

»You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

» You should write at least 150 words.

Number of visitor to two new music websites

Sample Answer 1:
The graph exhibits the public interest of using two new music websites named Music Choice and Pop Parade in the period of 15 days’ time. According to the graph, the trends were totally unstable and have swung extremely.

The statistics of Pop Parade shows the starting point of 120000 visitors on the first day and decreased during the following 7days with the minimum number of visitors of 40000 on the 7th day. The fluctuation of Music Choice website wasn’t as extreme as the Pop Parade in the first week. The Music Choice started with 40000 visitors in the 1st  day and the same number of visitors on the 7th day with small amount of changes during this week. In the 2nd week, both of the websites had the increasing interest of visitors i.e. Pop Parade reached to 140000 visitors on the 11th day and Music Choice reached to 120000 on the 12th day, and after some oscillations, the websites ended the 15 day period with 180000 and 80000 respectively.

According to the chart, the rate of 180000 was the maximum of viewers that belongs to Pop Parade and Pop Parade has More public interest for the viewers altogether than the Music Choice within these two weeks.

( Approximately 204 words )  

[ by Hossein Komijani ]

 

Model Answer 2:
The line graph compares visitors to two music websites which were recently launched online. In general, the number of visitors to these websites fluctuated but after day 11, both sites received a higher number of visitors. Besides, more people visited pop parade music site than they did to the music choice site.  

According to the diagram, pop parade music website was visited by 120 thousand people on the first day, whereas music choice got 40 thousand browsers on the same day. During the first week, pop parade’s visitor count showed an overall downward trend and on day seven both sites received roughly over 20 thousand visitors. However, overall visitors in the first week to the pop parade was significantly greater than that of music choice. Interestingly, visitors to pop parade site overwhelmingly increased after day 9 and it witnessed a great hike in the number of visitors on day 11 with around 150 thousand users. On this day, the other site was browsed by only over 20 thousand people. With a sharp dip on day 12 and 13, pop parade’s visitors went as high as 170 thousand on day 15. Music choice, on the contrary, accumulated the highest hits on day 12 and 14, which was around 120 thousand a day.

 

Sample Answer 3:
The line graph shows the number of users of two different music sites namely, Music choice and Pop parade within two weeks. It is clear that both music sites experienced a significant increase in terms of their number of visitors towards the end of the period. It is also noticeable that more people used Music Choice than Pop parade throughout most of the period.

Turning to details, the number of listeners visited Music choice was 120 thousand on the first day and was almost thrice than the visitors to Pop parade music website which was only 40 thousand on the same day. From first day onwards, the number of visits started to fell noticeably from 120 thousand in Music choice, except Pop Parade which had a slight decline.

By comparison, the number of people visited Music Choice was 120000, compared to Pop Parade which was used by 60000 people on the third day shown. There was a slight fluctuation in the number of visitors to Pop Parade between 20000 and 40000 from on the day 4 till 11, in comparison, has increased from 40k to 140k, the figure for Music choice in 2 days. The visitors of Pop Parade decreased steadily from 120k till nearly 118k in two days and then recovered at that rate, whereas visits of Music Choice peaked on the 14th day.

(Approximately 223 words | Written by - Boburshox)  

 

Sample Answer 4:
The given line graph compares the number of visitors in two new music-related websites for 15 days duration. As is observed from the graph, Pop Parade music sites got more visitors than the other website except for the 12th to 13th day. On an average, the Pop Parade got more hits from visitors than Music choice website.

Initially, Pop Parade got 120 thousand visitors on day 1 while the Music choice got around 40 thousand visitors on the same day. For the first 1 week, the number of hits on Pop Parade site declined and reached to less than 40 thousand on day 7. On the other hand, Music choice’s visitor count fluctuated and reached to 20 thousand on day seven. After day 9, Pop Parade’s visitors increased dramatically and reached to over 140 thousand on day 11. While the hits on Music Choice website increased to 120 thousand on day 12. On the last three days, both of the websites got a good number of visitors. Finally, on day 15th, the Music choice website’s visitors’ number reached to around 80 thousand while that number reached to over 165 thousand for the other website.

In conclusion, the Pop Parade had been more successful than the Music choice in terms of visitor count and both sites showed fluctuation on their visitor count.   

(Approximately 224 words)  

( This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

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+4 # Chie 2016-09-16 04:44
Can someone please check my task 1 answer?. Thank you.


The linear graph compares the variable of listeners in two recent music websites for a 15 days period. Overall, the given trends of both new music sites on the web significantly fluctuated. Pop parade experienced an increase of listeners on day 11 and it reached a peak on day 15, while music choice increased sharply on day 12 and 14 in the period of study.

The number of people who visited the Pop parade shows a considerable increase from day 1. This website got nearly 120 thousand visitors on the day one compared to the 40 thousand visitors for the Music Choice website on the first day. Then the Pop parade's visitors slightly decreased on day 2 but recovered on day 3. The lowest visitors trend of Pop Parade was on day 7 and dramatically that increased on day 11. After some time, day 12 and 13 maintained the same level respectively and recovered on day 15 with almost 170,000 people. Music choice got the lowest number of visitors on day 4, 7, 9, and 11 but it sharply rose up on day 12. Although music choice site levelled out on day 12 and 14 but it slightly dropped on day 15.
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+6 # Julius Richard 2016-09-16 04:21
Please someone kindly check my work. Thank you.

The given line graph compares the number of visitors to two new music sites for a 15 day period. In general, Pop Parade has started pretty well in the first 11 days where it has more visitors compared to Music Choice site. Both of the sites received fluctuating numbers of visitors during the given period.

During 1st and 9th day, Pop Parade music site exhibited an oscillation of visitors and it hit less than 40,000 listeners on the 7th day. However, between 9th to 11th day, Pop Parade's visitors gradually increased to 155,000 before it declined again to about 85000 and 80000 on 12th and 13th day respectively. On the 14th, Pop Parade's visitors had risen dramatically to 165000 and it increased slightly again on the 15th day.

For Music Choice site, it had fewer visitors compared to Pop Parade. But on the 12th and 13th day, it had at least 15000 more visitors than Pop Parade.
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+8 # Philomina 2016-03-26 22:09
The given diagram shows a comparison between the number of visitors on two new musical websites - musical choice and pop parade during consecutive 15 days. In general, pop parade site was more popular and represented a higher number of visitors through the periods.

Musical choice website received forty thousand visitors on the first day and its visitor rose steadily on the 2nd day and reached to 60000. From the third day till the eleventh, there were some fluctuations in the total number of visits. At which point there was a sharp upsurged to around 100,000 visitors on the 12th day accompanied by a slight decrease on day 13. Then it peaked at around 125,000 visitors and began to decrease on the day 15 to around 95,000 visitors.

On conversely pop parade website's visitors was 120,000 on day 1 and there was a downward trend till the ninth day. From this point, there was a sharp increase in the total visits about 150,000 accompanied by some fluctuations and increased considerably to around 175,000 visits on day 15.
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+2 # Goric 2017-02-27 13:55
The last paragraph should be the conclusion.
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-2 # Boburshox 2016-03-07 12:15
Is there anybody who can check my essays and score them?
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+4 # Nima 2015-07-01 03:45
Sample one and two are almost the same.
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+4 # Harman Preet Kaur 2014-09-22 02:47
This is very helpful for me in my IELTS study.
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+5 # Tejrai 2014-11-14 08:10
[quote name="HarmanPreet Kaur"]This is very helpful for me in my IELTS.
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