Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 42 - Highest level of education of women in someland in 1945 and 1995

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Pie Charts:

» You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. 

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the two graphs below.

» You should write at least 150 words.

The highest level of women education - Someland in 1945


The highest level of women education - Someland in 1995

Model Answer 1:
The pie charts show how the women education scenario in Someland changed by comparing the highest level of female education in 1995 with that of five decades earlier. Overall, a notable progress in education was achieved by women in Someland.

According to the diagrams, more than one-third women in Someland did not receive any formal education in 1945 while another one-third dropped out before they even completed their primary education. This is a dismaying figure for women in terms of their schooling in Someland in 1945. Moreover, almost a quarter female merely finished their sixth and ninth grades whereas only 4% made it to their 12th grades. Merely 1% of these women were awarded their first-degree certificates while none of them earned the post-graduation qualification. 

However, after fifty years, the progress was remarkable when one in every five women in Someland finished their post-graduation, half of them earned their first-degree and all women finished at least grade 9. No women in Someland in 1995 was deprived of their education and 20% of them finished school years to finish their 12 grades.

 

Sample Answer 2:
The provided pie charts present a comparison on the education level of females in Someland between the years 1945 and 1995. Overall, as is observed, more female got educated in Someland in 1995 than that of 1945.  

Firstly, women education scenario in Someland in 1945 was terrible as there was no postgraduate woman and only 1% women who completed their first degree in this year. It is of note that in 1945 the percentages of females who did not finish even 12th class degree comprised 95% of total women. 35% of these women never went to school at all.  

On the contrary, the women education in Someland after 50 years witnessed a noticeable improvement. In this year all women in Someland went to school and completed at least 9th grade. The percentage of women completed their first degree was half of the total woman. 20% women completed their post-graduation at that time which was a significant improvement in terms of the women education in 1945.   

In summary, women's schooling rates in Someland made a noticeable progress during a 50-year period from 1945 to 1995.

[Written by - David Inner]
 

Sample Answer 3:  
The given pie charts compare the highest education level among women in Someland in 50 years duration. As is observed from the given data, the women made a remarkable progress in education over the 50 year’s period in Someland.

Initially, in 1945, more than one-third women in Someland did not have any schooling experience while another one-third could manage education until third grade only. Less than 1% women in this year managed to get their graduation or post-graduation degree. This reflects the poor education level among the female of Someland in 1945.

After 50 years, the education level among women in Someland remarkably improved and more than 50% women finished their first degree while 20% of them completed their post-graduation. Remaining women either finished their 12th-grade education or studied till 9th grade. No women were left unattended to school and that’s a remarkable progress for women in education in Someland.

In summary, education level among women improved significantly over the 50 years period in Someland.

( This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

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+4 # Cavid Isgenderli 2016-12-18 23:08
The provided pie charts compare data on the highest education rates among female of Someland between 1945 and 1995.

Overall, as is observed, these pie charts comprise 7 education levels and 'no schooling' and 'third grade' made up the vast majority of the total and the others accounted for a minority fraction in 1945. However, after 50 years no education, year 6, third-grade education levels disappeared. Finally, women who completed their first degree generated half of the total women in Someland.

Firstly, it is of note that in 1945 the percentages of females who did not attend any school at all and those who finished only third-grade education comprised an overwhelming 70% of total women. While, after 50 years minimum education level among those women improved to 9th grade. Postgraduates came to the surface and accounted for exactly a fifth of all education segments at 20%. The 12th class observed the same percentage (20%), which was five times more than that of 1945. Despite first degree female graduates had the lowest percentage, only 1%, in 1945, after 50 years, it increased to 50% of the total.

To summarise, women in Someland made a remarkable progress in their schooling and education level in 1995 than that of 50 years ago.
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+2 # Phuong Anh 2016-06-05 02:33
The provided pie charts compare the education levels of women in Someland between 1945 and 1995. Generally speaking, the number of women who completed tertiary education increased considerably in 1995, and all female acquired education in 1995.

According to the given illustration, a major portion of women, 70%, in Someland did not get any formal schooling or completed just third grades (35% in each) in 1945. But turning to 1995, women education in Someland significantly improved. The proportion of women who achieved only primary school education was 15% in 1945, but after five decades, they completed at least 9th grades. Turning to the higher education scenario, from grade 12 and above, the ratio of women skyrocketed. The most noticeable increase was seen in the first-degree level with a climb from 1% to 50% after 50 years, followed by postgraduate and year 12 level with equal percentages of 20% in 1995 while the figures for them in 1945 were 0% and 4% respectively. In summary, women education in Someland progressed noticeably during 50 years time.
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+14 # Lester 2016-03-02 12:02
The illustrations depict data on the highest educational attainment by women. The study involves females in Someland in 1945 and in 1995.

In an overview, women who finished only 3rd grade and those without schooling were the highest in 1945, in contrast to those with postgraduate degrees. A remarkable progress in female education happened in the course of 50 years.

In 1945 the literacy rate for women in Someland varied. Females without education and those at the third grade comprised 70% of the whole. Those who happened to finish 6th grade only consisted of 15% of women in Someland. Strangely, there were no women under the said three categories in 1995. 9th graders had the same ratio after five decades, i.e 10%. However, 1995 brought milestones for the rest of the education levels among women. The majority of the female population in Someland gained their first degrees and had postgraduate honours with 50% and 20% respectively. Whereas these were no first-degree holders in 1945.
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+6 # Rama Krishna 2015-02-02 01:37
The supplied pie chart compares the topmost education levels of women in Someland during 1945 and 1995. The illustration is segregated into different segments - no schooling, third grade, years 6, years 9, year 12, first degree and post graduation.

As could be seen from the given diagrams, 35 percent women in Someland in 1945 did not attend schools at all. However, this trend had changed remarkably and in 1995, no woman in Someland was left out of the school.

Women, who completed their third-grade, sixth-grade and ninth-grade education, were about 35, 15 and 10 percent respectively in 1945. But in 1995, those reached to zero percent as woman education scenario progressed. All women in 1945 went to schools and this was a great advancement in women education sector in Someland. In 1945, about 4 percent women graduated from high schools but it rose up by five times in 1995. First degree was achieved by a very few percentage of females in the early age but it increased and reached to 50% in 1995. Similarly, female post graduates, which was about 20 percent in 1995 was a significant improvement. Finally, first-degree receiving women increased to 50% in 1995 which was 50 times higher than that of 1945.

In summary, female education in Someland progressed considerably in 50 years period.
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