Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 9 - If they traveled abroad and why they traveled

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Table + Column Graph:

»You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

»You should write not less than 150 words.

 

         VISITS ABROAD BY UK RESIDENTS BY PURPOSE OF VISIT (1994-98)

 

1994

1995

1996

1997

1998

Holiday

15,246

14,898

17,896

19,703

20,700

Business

3,155

3,188

3,249

3,639

3,957

Visits to friends & relatives

2,689

2,628

2,774

3,051

3,181

Other reasons

982

896

1,030

1,054

990

TOTAL

22,072

21,610

24,949

27,447

28,828

Travellers' destinations over the same period

Model Answer 1:
The given table compares the figures of a research on why 100 thousand of the UK residents visited overseas from 1994 to 1998, and the given bar chart illustrates which countries they travelled during this time.

As a whole, the majority of the UK citizens travelled abroad for entertainment, and Western Europe was their most favourable destination. By looking at the table, it can be seen that generally there was a growing tendency for the UK people to travel into other countries from 1994 to 1998. During the second year, in 1995, the total number of travellers marginally declined from just over 22000 to nearly 21500; however, it steadily grew and reached the peak of approximately 29000 in the year 1998.

These people gradually became more interested in traveling to all three regions during this period, but Western Europe was the best option. In 1994, just below 20,000 of the UK citizens went into Western Europe, compared with only almost 1000 into the North America. Furthermore, after a small drop in 1995, the population of Western Europe visitors remarkably increased and reached the maximum of above 24000 in 1998, which was far more significant than the other two locations.

In conclusion, the most proportion of the UK citizens had a trip to Western Europe to spend their holidays and for business trips.

[ Written by - Rambod ]

Sample Answer 2:
The provided charts show the data of a survey conducted on 100,000 people and the statistics shows the number of UK citizen travelled abroad during 1994 to 1998 for different purposes and their destinations. As is observed from the given graphs, most of the UK residents travelled on their holidays and Western Europe was their most favourite destination.

Initially, in 1994, more than 22 thousand UK resident traveled different foreign countries and among them, more than 15 thousand went on their holidays. For business tours, more than 3 thousand people travelled in other countries in the same year while more than 2 thousand people visited their friends and relatives. After 1 year, this number slightly decreased and for the rest of the years until 1998, the number steadily increased in almost all of the categories. Finally, in 1998, the total traveler number reached to more than 28 thousand and among them, more than twenty thousand people travelled to enjoy their holidays.

In 1994, almost 18 thousand people out of 22 thousand went to Western Europe which is significantly larger than the number of people traveled to North America and other parts of the world. The similar trends can be observed for the remaining years and the majority people of the UK went to Western Europe which makes this place the most popular tourist’s destination of UK people.

( This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

Sample Answer 3:
The supplied charts depict an outcome of a survey conducted among 100,000 people and the survey asks the reason behind the journey and preferred destinations between the periods of 1994 and 1998.

In the first graph, in 1994, the holiday was the most significant reason behind the United Kingdom citizen's travel and it accounted 15.246 people whereas, 982 people were traveled because of unspecified reasons. Interestingly, in the case of business and visit to friends and relatives, almost an equal number of people visited 3115 and 2689 respectively. In the number of holiday goers, though, there was a slight decrease in the figure in 1995, rest of the years there was a gradual increase in the account and reached above 20 thousand. In spite of some downward trends in the initial year (1995), there was a marginal increase in all the categories.

From the year 1994 to 1998, it is clearly seen the trend that North America and other areas obtained a rock bottom position with less than 2000 people. On the contrary, the number of visitors to Europe at a zenith level with around 20,000 per year, besides it showed a gradual hike in the total number of visitors to all the three destinations.

[ Written by - Tony ]

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Nitin Sharma
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Ankit Paul
Nice.
Aha
Table data sounds redundant, the holidays? Hmm, I think holiday only. Over the five years, omit 'the', second need for flying overseas (this sounds confusing, had travelled (past perfect), had a drop=dropped, have preferred (present perfect). Having a summary at the bottom may look like a conclusion, I suggest to have it at between introduction and first body paragraph.
Aha
peachyvhon@gmai l.com, it should be increased dramatically (VERB+ADVERB). One more thing, a dramatic increase (adjective+noun ). I took the IELTS a year ago and found out some of my mistakes. I suggest that you should be careful on these as it is pretty awkward to read.
Ahmed
These answers really help me. Moreover, they help me to prepare for my IELTS test.
Navid Agha
The provided data illustrates the destinations and reasons behind travelling abroad of 100,000 UK residents between the period 1994 and 1998. Destinations are classified into 3 regions- Western Europe, North America and other areas and the purposes of visits are assorted in 4 reasons - Holiday, Business, Visits to friends and relatives and other reasons. By looking at the table as a whole it can be seen that apart from 1995, the number of overseas visitors over the period increased. Visitors number in 1994 was just over 22000 and after an insignificant drop it reached to above 21000, the number of travellers reached around 29000 in 1998 with a steady upsurge. The major purpose of travelling abroad by the UK residents was holiday making. The bar reveals that English were more interested in Western Europe than North America. In 1994, just below 20 thousand people out of 22 thousand went to Western Europe which was significantly higher than the number of people travelled to North America and other parts of the world. A slight decline in 1995 was witnessed and the gradual increase occurred to each destination and the number of travellers in 1998 met just sort than 25000 for Western Europe and approximately just beyond 3000 for North America and Other areas in the world.
Harry
Thanks for sharing.
IELTS Mentor
The heading of the First Table is "VISITS ABROAD BY UK RESIDENTS BY PURPOSE OF VISIT (1994-98)". I guess you missed that!
Jane
Have they mentioned that the survey is conducted in the UK? Did I miss something?
Nima
We have one table and another illustration that show the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and their destination for years 1994-98. The provided table comprised different reasons and destinations of people who travelled in 4 categories Holiday, Business, Visits to friends and relatives and other reasons. As is presented holiday formed the most common purpose of holiday and business is after that with a big gap in number. Other reasons stabled almost and fluctuated in specific range, for example, this reason after a fall in 1995, increased and reached to pick with the number 1054 in 1997,then in 1998 again decreased to under 1000, 990.On other hand the presented graph depicted the number of people who had chosen Western Europe increased continuously (except in 1995) and had the most ratio between other places.In summary, the total number of visitors increased steadily from 22000 in 1994 to more than 28000 in 1998 and Western Europe had the most proportion of these tourists with more than 80 percents between other sides according to the graph.