Graph Writing # 118 - Men and women in further education in Britain in three periods

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Column Graph:

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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain

Sample Answer:
The given bar graphs show data on the British people’s full-time and part-time further education from 1970 to 1991. As is presented in the graphs, more men and women were studying full-time than part-time for the given period.

Initially, in 1970 and 1971, about 1000 thousand male were in full-time further education and this number decreased to average 850 thousand for 1980 and 1990. On the contrary, this number for part-time students increased over the time though the number was many times lower than the number of people in full-time education. In 1970, almost 100 thousand people were in part-time education and in next 20 years, this number increased to 200 thousand. On the other hand, in 1970, the total number of females who were engaged in full-time education was 700 thousand and this number increased over time and reached to 11000 thousand in 1990/91 which was even higher than the number of males who were in full-time further education in this year. The female part-time students’ number also increased over time and reached to over 200 thousand in 1990 from the initial number of 20 thousand in 1970.

In summary, females made progress over their male counterparts in terms of their involvement in full-time and part-time education in Britain for the given period.    

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Bahrom
The illustration depicts the number of male and female post-graduate part-time and full-time pupils in Britain in three decades.

As is seen, full-time students in further studies in Britain were far higher than those of part-timers but as time progresses, part-time education gradually gained popularity. More importantly, more women participated in further studies than the past while the trend was opposite for the male.

In details, almost one million male in Britain participated in full-time education in 1970/71 while this number was just 100 thousand for part-timer in the same year. On the contrary, female full-timer was about 700 thousand and part-time female students were as low as 50 thousand. Over time, the participating women in further education increased and reached over 1.1 million while the number of male participants actually decreased and dropped to just above 900 thousand after two decades. Women did a remarkable improvement in terms of their involvement in further education in Britain as their number almost doubled in just twenty years. The same cannot be said for the male post-graduate students. Interestingly, part-time further education became more popular over the year as more male, as well as female students, became engaged in it.

Yubraj
By the end of the period, females are seen to have been working full-time more than male. Is it okay to use this form of tense in writing?