Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 43 - The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Line Graph:

The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

    » You should write at least 150 words.
    » Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.
Rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000

Sample Answer 1:  
The provided graph compares the male and female smokers between the years 1960 to 2000 in Someland. As is observed from the given presentation, over the 40 years the number of male smokers dropped significantly while the number of female smokers increased.

Initially, in 1960, 600 male out of 1000 smoked and the female smokers were less 100 in number in this year. Over the next 40 years, the number of male smokers decreased steadily and reached to just over 200 out of 1000 people. On the contrary, though the number of female smokers was always less than the male smokers, their number increased over time. In 2000, the male and female smokers’ number both got at around 200 in 1000 people.

In summary, Male smokers were higher in number than female smokers from 1960 to 2000 but while the number of male smokers decreased steadily, female smoker’s number increased and in 2000, the percentage of male and female smokers got almost same.

(Approximately 163 words)
( This model answer can be followed as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.)

 

Model Answer 2:
The provided line graph presents data on the male and female smokers per thousand people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. As an overall trend, it is obvious that the rate of male smoker decreased over the time while the female smokers’ rate increase in the given period of time.

According to the given line graph, the ratio of male smokers in Someland was much higher than that of $female in 1960. 600 men out of 1000, smoked in this year while the ratio of women smokers was less than 100 per thousand. However, the male smokers’ percentage kept on decreasing steadily over the time and an opposite trend could be observed among the women. After 20 years the percentages or male and female smoker in Someland were 48% and 31% respectively. Finally, in 2000, the percentages of male and female smokers became almost the same. In 2000, the male smokers’ ratio was 20%, which was a significant decline in the ratio of the male smoker, while it was 20% for women, which shows that the percentage of female ration doubled in 40 years. 

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0 # Bizu 2017-08-28 07:35
The graph illustrates the rate of male and female smokers per 1000 somelanders from 1960 to 2000. It is clear that the ratio of male smokers decreased gradually over the 5 years’ period whereas smoking rate among women remarkably increased until it turned down between 1975 to 1980.

According to the line graph, 6 men out of 10 in Someland in 1960 were smokers and this rate was six times higher than that of female smokers. In the following years, the number of male smokers gradually decreased. In 1975 the ratio of male smokers dropped to 2:1 and finally in 2000, just 250 men per thousand smoked tobacco.

Reversely, the proportion of female smokers were less than 100 per 1000 in 1960. However, this figure surged to over 300 in just 20 years. Thereafter, the number gradually decreased to 1 in every five in the year 2000. The ratio of female smokers in 2000 was almost the same of male smoker’s ratio.
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+6 # Sebastián Gómez Vidal 2016-03-06 14:34
The graph compares the number of male and female smokers per thousand people in Someland over a 40 years period - between 1960 and 2000.

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that the number of male smokers gradually declined whereas women showed a steady growth. However, there were more male smokers than women smokers during this period.

Looking at the details, 70% people in Someland smoked in 1960 and only ten percent of them was female. There was a steady drop of male smokers, around 30% in 2000. Regarding female smokers, they stood at approximately 10% in 1960, at a ratio 1 to 6 with male smokers. For the period in question, at this point, they grew by to 20% to over 30% in 1975, remained at this figure for the next decade, after which they witnessed a marginal decrease to around 20% in 2000.

Both genders reduced their smoking and in 2000. 40% people in Someland smoked with the similar percentages of male and female smokers. Over the 4 decades, the female smokers ratio doubled whereas male smokers ratio dropped to one-third.
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+2 # Nima 2015-08-08 09:15
The given graph depicts the ratio of smoking per 1000 people in somewhere from 1960 to 2000 for both genders with plummet for each 5 years.

As is provided as a census of a perusal in the presented line graph women had under 0.1 in 1960 but the male had the most amount of this factor in 40 years with 60%. In 1965 number of smoker women increased noticeably and met 20% and continued this scenario until 1970 but in 1975 this ratio took off and reached to 30% as the summit for women. After 1975 women percentage slumped until 2000 and achieved 20% in 2000. On the contrarily, men conformed subtractive scenario and declined monotonously until 2000 and met 25% in that year as the nadir.

In conclusion, the most amount of gap between female and male smokers was 50% in 1960 and the least one was less than 5% in 2000. The number of males who used to smoke cigarette decreased more than 30% but this amount increased for female.
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